Today Was A Bad Day

Full of emotions... so touchy.. and relates to me... sad love poem..... good work here

my favorite lines

Ur choosing a new girlfriend now n I still believe that u r my boyfriend and being your ex is impossible

I loved it very good wording

I read your poem, but it really wasn't my style. It didn't seem to have any rhythm or flow. It seemed as if you were just writing down your thoughts as they streamed through your mind. And I thought all the 'texting' characters was either laziness or stylistic, but either way, I found it distracting. For me, poetry is more than just writing down ones emotions. It involves expressing yourself poetically vs. writing down literal thoughts. Sure you can write a poem that tells me your angry and hurt (who isn't), but I'd prefer if it done with some poetic flair. Not that literal poetry cannot be effective, when done nicely, it's very effective. Often, the poems I read rely on emapthy/sympathy on behalf of gentle reader; meaning, I understand what the words 'hurt' and 'angry' mean, and I can empathize/sympathize, but it misses the mark when looking for a touching message.

If you read, "Miss King Is Fat" by Abracadabra. I think this is an excellent example of a literal poem that works.
I would recommend "Ashes of Time" by Ingrid as an abstract poem that deals with love and death. It tells her love story in a deep and touching poem, as she watches her loved-one cremated on a funeral pire. It is an expansive poem that leaves enough room for the reader to imagine...

keep penning..writing is a process. Practice doesn't make perfect, practice makes refinement.

A great poem I loved it and enjoyed reading it,,,a wonderful job

Thanks :)