Comments : River Queen

  • 11 years ago

    by Sylvia

    More complicated words to present the message but the story is the same as has been written before by many others. The man's dreams and desires of what his "woman, his love" will be, his hunt for her, how their meeting will be, the emotions he feels, dreams of what she will look like and how they will act when he finds his love.

    Even though the story, message is not original in that is has been told many times, many ways, the poem is extremely well written and readable. I will have to give credit for this version of the love story because it does show imagination in the presentation. The technical merits are top notch.

  • 11 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Oh yes, the story will always revolve around the same plot, just the presentation form changes, from author to author.

  • 11 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    It is the way you write and your usage of words gives this whole poem a mythical image for the mind to see..liked the read :) Very well penned!

  • 11 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Dude I am in awe of this write. You did not only an word usage but images are clear and vivid. Emotional value is creative and abundant

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    I kind of agree with Sylvia, but at any levell.. This is amazingly written with musicality.. Yes, I can hear the notes being compose with every other word read.

    And the style you knitted those stanzas with is very provocative, flowing and flaws-free.

    Amazing one [y]

  • 11 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    I seem to be so far behind again in comments.
    What you did with this poem was nothing but sheer genius . I loved the flow and every word penned

    Connie

  • 11 years ago

    by Renegade Angel

    I knew that people would think this poem great! Especially your vocab, and the idea is what many have portrayed, but you have YOUR own way of writing it. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by my blue eyes cry

    Beautiful <3

  • 11 years ago

    by NightFlyer

    A poem of deep desire bursting with intensity and richly worded in the style of the romantic poetry of centuries ago. Very well done!

  • 11 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    This is an amazing piece..nice choice of words and the flow is amazing...5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow this piece is amazing. You have presented a wonderful purpose to write and you seized the opportunity to create such a wonderful piece. The emotion here is fantastic and it really does show up in every aspect of the piece. The word choice was fantastic because it helped create an element of this piece's story. The flow really is easy to follow and well constructed. All in all this piece is excellent 5/5 for sure

  • 10 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Her voice, perhaps it is her voice
    that lures me silent and tamed
    Her skin albicant, lapped in milk and honey
    The radiant of all, those dwell in bodies

    and her halo topaz, sets this heart throbbing
    Must she devise separation between hands intertwined

    For I have sailed across the oceans of time
    to find my river queen
    to dock within her harbor lovat
    Must she, my ardent star
    beacon my homecoming

    ^^those are probably my most favorite though it was a lil hard for I loved the wording and the deepness of this wonderful poem I loved it and enjoyed reading it it had divine beauty through the lines and wow I loved a fantastic job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Angel

    This is so cute i love it a 5 from me
    -Angel

  • 10 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    Wow... That was so... Incredible...
    Your descriptions gave me chills and pulled me in.
    Incredible job.
    Adding you to my favorites.
    5/5
    -Heather

  • 10 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    Denitley a well thought up poem....you can really tell when someone pours their heart into a poem and this was one of them.....I liked it a lot t.....the sensual lovey dovey warm feeling.... it's a cute poem......and an amazing one too

    keep up the good work :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Aubrey

    This is so pretty.....great poem:)

  • 8 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    This is a neat poem loved it