More complicated words to present the message but the story is the same as has been written before by many others. The man's dreams and desires of what his "woman, his love" will be, his hunt for her, how their meeting will be, the emotions he feels, dreams of what she will look like and how they will act when he finds his love.
Even though the story, message is not original in that is has been told many times, many ways, the poem is extremely well written and readable. I will have to give credit for this version of the love story because it does show imagination in the presentation. The technical merits are top notch.
This is an amazing piece..nice choice of words and the flow is amazing...5/5
11 years ago
Wow this piece is amazing. You have presented a wonderful purpose to write and you seized the opportunity to create such a wonderful piece. The emotion here is fantastic and it really does show up in every aspect of the piece. The word choice was fantastic because it helped create an element of this piece's story. The flow really is easy to follow and well constructed. All in all this piece is excellent 5/5 for sure
Her voice, perhaps it is her voice
that lures me silent and tamed
Her skin albicant, lapped in milk and honey
The radiant of all, those dwell in bodies
and her halo topaz, sets this heart throbbing
Must she devise separation between hands intertwined
For I have sailed across the oceans of time
to find my river queen
to dock within her harbor lovat
Must she, my ardent star
beacon my homecoming
^^those are probably my most favorite though it was a lil hard for I loved the wording and the deepness of this wonderful poem I loved it and enjoyed reading it it had divine beauty through the lines and wow I loved a fantastic job 5/5
Wow... That was so... Incredible...
Your descriptions gave me chills and pulled me in.
Adding you to my favorites.
10 years ago
by Wicked Ways
Denitley a well thought up poem....you can really tell when someone pours their heart into a poem and this was one of them.....I liked it a lot t.....the sensual lovey dovey warm feeling.... it's a cute poem......and an amazing one too