Christmas

This was bizarre in the best possible way - daring too, considering how people feel about xmas and children! Suitably dark and well written.

This was awesome. really. i have this thing where i re-write children stories like this and give them a darker atmosphere, so i really enjoyed this one a lot, to me this was really funny.

I agree with lioness...
I found it a bit freaky and it was a good poem overall...
Good work...

You know th is poem to me reads a little Christmassy as well as something out of the bible. It reminds me of the story where the first borns are taken away from the parents.

This poem did kinda freak me out considering I do love christmas (though I don't believe in Santa of course)

Maybe that was your intention... to freak us out :D if so well done

if not

woops

x

Not so much dark I don't think, there was a hint of comedy in this, I think you took the meaning of christmas to a place unknown, and maybe I don't want to find out.

The flow was good and rhymes were okay,
I just don't know what to say.
Creepy