Comments : Betrayed at Sunrise

  • 12 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    Love love love this :)

    You can see everything play out like its a movie. It flows so perfectly together & draws your attention in to keep reading.

    Amazing Job
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Whatever works

    I like poems with short lines

    cuz they are always creative and flows well

    and your wordchoice made it even better .

    love it 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    I too agree with the two above...The poem seem to be like a story and a good one...:))
    choice of words is good and the short sentences keep me glued to end the poem...:)

    good work..:))

  • 12 years ago

    by Jess

    Wow, I Love This.
    You Wrote 2 to 4 words in each line..
    and it somehow worked.:)
    Perfectly:)
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Well done, I am proud to have a members that talented in my club, claps for this. if by Tuesday it was nominateable still, i will vote for it. Both cases, claps..I love it!

  • 12 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I really liked this one sweetie. I read almost like a riddle. I love the imagery and how you worded some of the lines. Very nice read. -Nik

  • 12 years ago

    by Kelin Hurt

    I think this is a cool poem. Right on yo.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Again, the title drew me in. :)

    I really like the short paced lines. The rhymes made it flow really nicely... it was just like it flew off your tongue as you read it.

    I like the darkness to this, gave me chills at times.

  • 4 years ago

    by A.M.Jacobsen

    Very inspiring, well done!