Comments : The Color Ivy

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    And I think you for sharing this master piece with me :)
    OMG M7mad, I cant even tell you how much I loved it, I loved it to the extent that I would hold a mic and go sing on a stage :O

    AMAZING AMAZING AMAZINGGGGGGGG !!

    NOMINATION <3

  • 12 years ago

    by Sunshine

    This is totally amazing, a front page poem, without doubt my favorite by you, except haydek tab3ite ana b7eba kter kter..hehe but this wow...i will nominate too next week if it ddnt win this week..

    i just think this is amazing, with tis creativity, originality, with its word choice, with its colors and feelings

    speechless...wish this was mine !

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow, this poem is amazing! I love it from start to finish... I must say I imagined this poem as a song! I was thinking of how it would sound if you sang it, and I think it would be a pretty awesome song, maybe you could try singing it and see what happens!

    I really liked the title, and loved the repetition of "You color my voice with colors of ivy
    Imprisoning me in my own room" I think it adds so much meaning to the poem. You did a great job with this poem, and your poems always have passion and meaning to them =)

    Brilliant poem!

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    I really enjoyed this piece from you. It's a very strong poem with a strong message and yet you have managed to get it across without it been too ''in your face'. I think this is because it had a melodic rhyme to it....like rap perhaps? Anyway, as I said, very enjoyable.

    My tongue is hesitated to talk

    ^^^^

    I think it should be hesitant?

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    An amazing write.
    You said so much in each line that the reader could completely relate too.
    Strong wording, full of passionate, and emotional value.

  • 12 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    This poem echoes a revolutionary's voice (Egyptian) seeking true liberation (democracy), from suppression, first by a dictator and now his henchmen (military). The 2-line stanza's carry the hidden sentiments very well. The poem seethes through your mind, and stands out because of the strength in the desire to breakthrough oppression.

    Oh don't you color my voice with colors of ivy
    imprisoning me in my own room

    I interpret it as ...don't you suppress my voice ...colors of ivy could be interpreted 2 ways: as a poison, or as the bright red colors of the Boston ivy (fall color Ivy), with red depicting blood as in more bloodshed. Imprisoning me in my own room.....depicts stifling in some form, in one's own home=country.
    The ensuing stanzas depict the intense anguish that builds within, with the desire to be free ...to be liberated from tyranny spanning decades.
    Very well portrayed throughout.

    The ending stanzas powerfully portray a revolutionary's thoughts and strengthening voice:

    Stones can't kill
    Words can't kill
    Bullets can't kill
    Bombs can't kill
    Lies can't kill

    You can't kill an Idea, sir!
    You can only torment an Idea, sir!
    To grow fiercer and stronger, sir

    And a superb ending rhetoric to the military rulers:

    You can only color my voice with colors of ivy
    Dashing to ravish yours in my own room

    (Judging comment 12-18-11)

  • 7 years ago

    by ether

    This is an amazing write! I love "you can't kill an idea" - however it almost seems as though this poem belongs in a Sad or Dark category with the morbid themes throughout. I enjoyed the simplicity of the writing style, the short stanza's executed your message very well. There's good flow here too. Well written.