Nice work with the form and you did learn about syllables, by the hardest. This took you out of your comfort zone, you met the challenge, the tanka gives us images of desert life and then a thought of something you could not tell someone, a mixture of images and emotions. Well done.

And I could not tell her why-
my world is set to deep blue.

This part here shows the depth of sadness where
one is unable to open out his heart..and that in itself is a painful thing. Well done with your
first attempt of a form poetry..you did well!

Oh my Gaurav what an awesome Tanka :-) You did so so good. I really love the wording. It's almost dreamy'
Wasn't this TJ's challenge to you? Wait till he reads it challenge met and aced. lol

Connie

Now this shows you can meet any challenge thrown at you. It's not all that good, It's fantastic bro.
your wording is absolutely awesome. You made sense, with accuracy.

WINNER WINNER :-)

I really like this piece. Its short but says a lot.

Woah! That was really good. It's so linked, no verses here and there, it's amazing how you managed to keep it as a one-unit. You aced that ;)

GREAT!

Fabulous job!!

here is my interpretation...

Faces of desert

---This sentence makes me think about lonely people.

fraying against palms slowly
reflect shades of hue

---- by fraying it makes me think about someone's temper and palms are usually in warm temperatures so to me its more like hot temper more like anger or frustration.

by reflect shades of hue
I think its more like, It reflects how that someone feels at the moment... its character.

And I could not tell her why -
my world is set to deep blue

--- And the author doesn't know why but he is depress...

well done. :D

This is amazing. I myself not very comfortable with forms but have tried few and i could relate to the feeling you get after completing one successfully.
Did great indeed.

all the best and take care

I love this form ... delicate and powerful piece ~

Woooow!!
OMG this is perfection in one verse !!

Well done 5/5

Woooow!!
OMG this is perfection in one verse !!

Well done 5/5

I enjoyed reading this. Your use of words was effective in etching the image in my mind. That made it more fun for me to read. For your first ever structured poem, you did a great job. This didn't seem forced one bit, which is always great. Nicely done!

I love haiku's!!!

Tanka's seem more challenging though so well done with this poem!

I quite like the poem itself. Well written and so much is said with such little words

To me the poem is about a person that is depressed and is with someone.

You mentioned in the poem that you could not tell her why you are so blue (blue being sad). Is it because she would not understand why or the idea of depression or because of being ashamed (for me I don't tell people because of being ashamed)

Well written! Loved it

x

Great composition~

Faces of desert - great entrance!

my world is set to deep blue - great ending!

Very mesmerizing...5/5!

Best,
Ray