Broken Through

by Renegade Angel   Dec 21, 2011


This was collaborated with kips, be sure to thank himas well.

A tale of broken love.

HER:
Our hearts fell together and we thought
they were synchronized or intertwined;
I loved you without any breath of doubt.
You shined my eyes.

HIM:
Your smile brightened my day;
I never knew I shined your eyes,
but I knew you loved me undoubtedly,
because I could read it even in your eyes.

HER:
Deceived by shadows of temptation and excess,
it became us.
I still thought the light was shining in you,
but my heart beat and pumped faster, telling me to cease this course.

HIM:
I held unto you as things fell apart,
'tis weakness for me to let go so soon,
'tis wisdom for me to remain strong,
without you, my sun, there is no illumination for me, the moon.

HER:
I thought I knew better
so you shined your light and I went through,
but I broke down and we fell apart,
then I realized that we were never meant to be.

HIM:
At first my heart was broken when you let go;
'tis a virtue of obedience to heed a simple call,
but now I know that letting go of you,
whom I love so dearly, was the best decision after all.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow a fantastic job u guys,,I love love loved it! :) it's an amazing write and it's sad,,imagery is great and flow of course,,excellent 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    Our hearts fell together and we thought
    they were synchronized or intertwined;
    I loved you without any breath of doubt.
    You shined my eyes.

    Openeing lines were mesmoirzing, when you fall completely in love and it is mutual it is the best feeling...thats why i love how you used synchronized or intertwined in this. It is lovely, a conversation between him and her, each side written down. it is quite sad though, lost love is always sad, but good write guys :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Kips2.0

    Great job Renegade Angel, it's nice working with you. With you, my work flowed better. This is all you...

    Good job.
    5/5 from me.