That I will always be the one,
but that was a lie in every state
my world seems to be crumbling
by the roar of these tectonic plates

Good introduction with some sadness as your hopes have crumbled. Loved the use of tectonic plates there, very creative.

SHE said it will be like a scene
from a movie, I guess now I won't
find out what happens at the
end of this trilogy
my eyes are imperilled
to black and white, the night
we spent at the weekend
you are now not seeking

Your reference to your love life to a movie is wonderful. Everything is possible in movies. But sad thing is that no matter long it is, every movie ends.

I feel like a fool,
SHE said I'll take care of you,
if you loved me
you wouldn't have forgotten
we had a life to begin, but
in the end it was ruined

This is i think is where you let it all out/ You clearly express what you feel and thinking why did you believe and trust her when she said she would take care of you.

A well written poem that i saw nothing worth fixing.5

Thanks for your comments its really appreciated, everything I write is not pre-written its more or less free style and from there I update my poems when I have a better phrase or stanza to make it sound more approachable

I know how it is to be hurt. I get let down all the time. But one day u will find a girl that won't hurt u. Like I will find my Guy. I just stopped looking and hopefully he will pop up out of no where.

Thx, but i have never been hurt as i have never had a girlfriend or fall in love before, this poem was to show how i would feel if she did hurt me

It hurts to be lied to
To be let down..I know the feeling it really hurts

I loved the read(:
5/5(:

That I will always be the one,
but that was a lie in every state
my world seems to be crumbling
by the roar of these tectonic plates

-In the first place, you're first stanza explained clearly what was the emotion of the persona here. I can visualized you're feeling while writing this piece. I like the way you contemplate "tectonic plates". Nice introduction.

SHE said it will be like a scene
from a movie, I guess now I won't
find out what happens at the
end of this trilogy like a melody
my eyes are imperilled
to black and white, the night
we spent at the weekend
you are now not seeking

-The feeling here flows deep...and I like the way you used a about the scenes in movie.

I feel like a fool,
SHE said I'll take care of you,
if you loved me
you wouldn't have forgotten
we had a life to begin,
in the end it was ruined as
love was not made for me
to feel forever

-And the last part supported the whole piece. It so touchy and very emotional. I was touch by the last part. I really enjoy reading. Keep writing.
God bless:))