Comments : The Final Episode

  • 12 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    'Mindblowing' is what i am left with to say, simply breath-taking.

    I must have read these lines 10 times by now and the imapct is still the same...great write.

    Your instinct tells you to go,
    but your lust begs you to stay
    as you find you have lost your way

    all the best and take care

  • 12 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Words languished in my mind
    have stopped the beating of my heart

    ^^This opening statement describes the loss of something deep that it has left the writer speechless..at a loss of words.

    Your instinct tells you to go,
    but your lust begs you to stay

    ^^It is one of those situations where one is caught between two worlds and unable to just deal with one..that is what I felt here.

    as you find you have lost your way
    so forget the hurt and pain
    as I shatter our dreams,
    so forget the hurt and pain
    that echo our silent screams.

    ^^This part to me sounds very painful where there is no medicine to heal it..

    This is the final episode
    where my life ends with yours,
    paralyzed from inside the core,
    enraptured by a fainting promise
    where I've been decayed,
    enraptured by a fainting promise
    where I now eternally lay.

    ^^Reading this final stanza reminds me of Romeo and Juliet. Where love's dreams and wishes are buried forever without having to live it.

    A very sad, sad write and the repetition of the lines makes it even more powerful..excellent write and I hope all is well with you..take care.

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Sad and the title fits so well. The end the finality of it.
    So well written , filled with emotion. Excellent

  • 12 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Magnificent lines~

    Your instinct tells you to go,
    but your lust begs you to stay
    as you find you have lost your way
    so forget the hurt and pain
    as I shatter our dreams,
    so forget the hurt and pain
    that echo our silent screams.

    Good job! 5/5!

    Cheers,
    Ray

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    The title really cought my attention:)

    Words languished in my mind
    have stopped the beating of my heart
    where this world will fall apart,
    as the sky tears away
    inside of my life,
    as the sky tears away
    with each stroke of my knife.
    ^^
    its a really great start for this poem, and its my fav stanza :)

    I love thus poem, 5 from me^_^