Comments : Bad Timings

  • 12 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    This poem would be good even if it were only the morning after utterances of a man who was so lost in his stupor that the cops raiding the club did not become real to him until it was too late.

    The 'angel' beating him, though, gives a clue that the story is a metaphor in which the police are projections of his own guilt-ridden subconscious confronting him at a nadir in his life. He has nothing of value to show for his existence, just pandering and poison (rubbers and dope). Well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Sylvia

    This could apply to women as well. The morning afters bring regrets to many and guilt over the behavior exhibited. These episodes make a person feel less than human, bring the guilt and shame. Well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Interesting write and like Sylvia said it could also apply to women.

    He introduced himself as my angel
    And whacked my cheeks out
    Told me to smile with broken tooth
    But don't wish for a scream or shout

    ^^This could also be taken as a sign or a person who is there to turn you on the right path in this case the police!

    Like professional I turned my pocket inside out
    As a thought of bribing gave me some hope
    He knew I have read between punches, until
    All that popped out were rubbers and dope

    ^^haha..this part just made me laugh and this piece is written in such a way it is like watching a scene played out on tv. Liked the read..and keep penning!

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Another great piece from you, I'm happy to see you writing more again. Your poems are always inspiring to me, your talent and style one of a kind.
    It seems it's all been said from the above so like usual I'm the late bloomer and will just say Awesome write my friend

  • 12 years ago

    by Jad

    I think my immaturity hinders me from fully understanding this poem. I have read the comments and also the poem several time but I from what I can tell, it seems as if you are trying to find a release from this world but instead you are getting abused or perhaps feeling the regret of such releases that you once did. The poem could also be talking about maybe a pass you are trying to run away from, but the memories are constant reminders and also the scars you now carry. The poem, however, was somewhat strong but it really lacked in some areas that would greatly make it more stronger and make it flow a bit easier.

    All in all, though I think the poem is good though I'm still befuddled as to what it means. Still it is nice to see you writing again and I hope you are doing well. I can't wait to see some more poems by you. Great job and keep writing!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Here is good work.