Really grear poem:)

Oh my god Liz!
Now I can comment properly :)

How was I to know
that I would need to
hurt myself more than
you would hurt me?
^^^^^
Wow, what a stanza, I can relate to this like so much, things can only hurt us if we let them, and sometimes we feel that due to that we are hurting ourselves.

A sweep of the hair,
a kiss on the forehead -
all appear so distant to you
though it feels like
only yesterday
to me.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Oh, how soft, how true. Such awesomeness Liz.

I want to escape
from this grasp that
you seem to have
on me -

but,

If I am destined to
suffocate, it is
better by my own
hands,
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
OH MY GOODNESS, this is amazing!!!!!!!!

The only way to
drown out my pain
is to drown myself
in something else.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
and that ending was just bloody brilliant :P

I will say this is so emotional, I felt every part of your pain, it's heartbreakingly sad but totally beautiful at the same time.

Oh my god, I just love this, it's definately a win and going in my faves.

Wow!

xxxxxx

Amazing poem, i just hope is a poem.

Like the autumn leaves but you are still my summertime.

That sentence is heartbreaking. :(
But at the end to drown yourself in something else,
Hmm I like the ending. But if you know how to swim then swim no need to drown. If you don't know, there might be a save guard waiting to rescue you. Just hang in there.Relax and everyone can float.

First,

A sweep of the hair,
a kiss on the forehead -
all appear so distant to you
though it feels like
only yesterday
to me.

^ I suggest that you change 'though it feels like only yesterday to me' .. to... 'though it only feels like yesterday' .. just a thought because in the next stanza there is to me.

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Okay, whatever.
You gave me shivers. I cannot say much, but Liz.... you're brilliant :')

Liz,

I felt your pain. Such a heartfelt poem. I loved it.

Wow..then drawn in my heart then..hehe..gud...

I can feel the anguish, so touching !
well done : )

Lovely as always.........good to focus on something else to let go of the pain-to drown out the pain .

Oh, For gods sake, I need to sleep! it's 2 am, and I knew once I comment the 1st poem by you, the drill will take over!

This is simply, awwesome! where to start...
The inability to get over someone, I think it kills you every single day.

the paradox in this poem, so much like the situation itself, to love someone, when you hate them. someone said, "it's not how much u love them, when you love them, it's how much you love them, when you hate them"

The desire here of getting rid of his power on you, and here i mean the power of the memories..or the hurt he cause/causing.
for you, he WAS the hope, and IS (now) everything...killing the hope, in you...

I also sense this desire for dignity, self respect, or "Ego" this call for giving it a push up, yet..you're only trying to find something ellse to drown you, rather than him. tho the same ending..but you are focusing on the reasons..
which is ...indeed your "focal point""

wow did you even notice that ?.. you kill me !
HATS OFF< BOOTS OFF!..all is off, when your poetry is ON.

You were still my
summertime.
^
beautiful :]

How was I to know
that I would need to
hurt myself more than
you would hurt me?
^
Typical (in meaning, not in content..as "in emotions" = I relate )

A sweep of the hair,
a kiss on the forehead -
all appear so distant to you
though it feels like
only yesterday.

^
simple, yet deep, true, innocent, and above alll..sad.

If I am destined to
suffocate, it is
better by my own
hands,

than yours.

^
powerful!!!!!!!!!!!!! VERY

The only way to
drown out my pain
is to drown myself
in something else

^^
that blew the hell out of me...really, you are such a very inspiring poet.