TJ-

This piece is a beautiful read of nature, and to me it has a native american flavor to it... when i was young my grandfather would read poetry written by ancient for fathers before him.... it was mesmerizing... I really love this piece and I'm going to add it to my favorite poem list....

the last line...is wow~

"Desert ghosts wail in grief for recent lost brothers "

My King

This one is stellar.Exalt!

This was a delight the first time I ever read. A story of the wild horses and a part of their lives gives the reader images that take them away to be a part of that story. Well done.

First, I love the title, it caught my eye. Second, this poem was really beautifully written. I wasn't expecting this topic, so it really intrigued me.

"Heads high in pride, challenging the wind
A stallion, black as a moonless night and constant
Snorts his dominance as powerful muscles ripple "
>> this part was so well-written, such great imagery.. I love the comparison of the stallion to a moonless night... And I like how they are high in pride and challenge the wind! Like nothing can hit them..

"Warrior hearts racing, hooves pound the ground
Fighting for freedom and loss of their soul"
>> Another amazing part... really well chosen words that invoked emotion in me as the reader.

The ending was perfect as well! Great job with this poem TJ =D Well done!

I'm speechless this time -i love horses ......

Once you get a chance to organize your thoughts, you just come out with a masterpiece.
First, I got to say that title was PERFECT for the poem, and its a catchy one too, it reflects bravery.
Second, the metaphors used in this poem just gave it that extra strenght and depth. You managed to carry on a steady flow fro. Line one all through the poem.

Loved the idea behind it, loved the feeling you get after reading it.

Well done brave man :)

This write is moving. It incorporates sounds, and that makes if feel alive to me. Great job, TJ:)

The title cought my attention:)
But the poem cought all my attention, great poem^_^

Nice piece, I like a few phrases here but I especially like...

"Man prevails, and the proud are now humbled"

Sometimes only a victory can humble a haughty person.

Good poem

I'm speechless for starts, looking through my vocabulary to praise this exquisetly but sad masterpiece. Your style is admirable and your wording are soothing to ears. The rhythm flows smoothly. You always know how to express thoughts and feelings using natures wonders. And I'm really awed by your beautiful penned poems. You've indeed touched our 'hearts with thunder as powerful as muscles ripple'. Excellence in poetic musings. With respect, take care, Cheers!

Oh I love the images in this poem. Especially those coming from the first stanza.

Very magestic with the colours and the stallion. What a sight that would be!!!

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I am in love with the language :D ... I love it when people write like this :D mixing imagery with beautiful language :D
The scenes you have described are so vivid and lively ...

//The plains become quiet and the dust has cleared
Desert ghosts wail in grief for recent lost brothers
// I loved these lines :D so beautifully crafted :D

To begin with I really liked the title "Thunder Hearts!" As for the poem itself is simply stunning!

A majestic sight thunders across the plains
Colors of black brown and whites a blur

^I like the opening lines here. It gives such a vivid image for the reader to grasp.

Heads high in pride, challenging the wind
A stallion, black as a moonless night and constant

^WOW..this is my favorite part. The description you gave here is just like watching on on tv..I can see the black stallion..its beauty!

Snorts his dominance as powerful muscles ripple
A whicker and the herd turn with out faltering

^Another image I like here! Your description in this first stanza alone brings everything alive!

A brown cloud of dust shrouds the tracks and fills the sky
Mane and tails flourish like flags of war held in pride

^This is another one that I liked very much as well. A brown cloud of dust...its a good way to describe the speed of the horses and the majesty of their figure standing up with pride like a flag indeed..loved this part :)

Running for their lives as ropers close in from behind
Chasing them into devils canyon where spirits die

^Reading this part brings a touch of sadness as it portrays the fall of these majestic animals..running to their deaths because of man's greed.

Man prevails, and the proud are now humbled
The plains become quiet and the dust has cleared
Desert ghosts wail in grief for recent lost brothers

^All good things, animals who live with pride comes to an end; like the reign of a kingdom crumbles. Just like these powerful animals stopped and captured. So this line "Man prevails, and the proud are now humbled" really closes the chapter and brings about a silence to their thunder hearts.

I really enjoyed this read for its descriptive images and the emotions it had in it..excellent write..keep penning :)

Hmmm... well, I really enjoyed the depiction. Love the language you used.

Man prevails, and the proud are now humbled
The plains become quiet and the dust has cleared
Desert ghosts wail in grief for recent lost brothers

Wonderful lines!

Wow it's always amazingly written,,I love the great wording and imagery,,ur best at that I think...as far as I know,,,fantastic job 5/5

Such a sad write done beautifully