Rape (my story)

Is this a true story?
If it is, I feel so sorry for you!I've been mildly sexually assaulted.
If it isn't, Great poem!

This is a good and powerful poem about a horrific event. You have captured your emotions well and penned them very clearly.

I have a suggestion to add a bit more power to the poem :

I was left crying
But you didnt care i felt like i was dying

- the ending to your poem could be stronger by simply sperating the last line into two different lines like this :

I was left crying
But you didnt care

I felt like i was dying.

- For me this just puts emphasis on how much this affected you and the reader is left with that last statement knowing clearly how you felt during this awful time.

Good job on this.

I love that you wrote about your horrible experience... i understand your pain and hurt because ive gone through it many times... You captured the exact emotions almost perfectly. Truly splendid read my dear. 5/5

Rape is so common here in South Africa- it sickens me . It is such a violent crime and rapists often walk free here . It breaks my heart .........because its not natural to violate another human being ........this is so touching . X

Good write. very short. very emotional. good poem.