Great Tanka Jenni I love it:)

Jenni you little cracker lol ...

I swear you said you suck at formed poetry

this was amazing imagery i loved the last line

that drifts it towards skyline.

I can just see my self looking straight down between the ocean and the sky with the moon refecting

so beautiful your starting to improve dramaticly

:) one of your best

What I love about this piece is its imagery.

I love the idea about the moon over the water but also I feel as it goes deeper because of how the moon controls the tide. This is also the image I got from this piece.

I also imagine waters going back and forth and looking in the distance and seeing the water along the skyline.

Beautiful hun,

x

Jenni,

Stellar piece my friend!

Omgosh I love love love this. It was a perfect poetic way to describe what makes a wave :) how crazy, you create somethine beautiful out of a few lines!

Great tanka, perfectly written :)

The image in this piece is clear and peaceful. excellent for someone that swore they were no good at it :)

Its a dark shadow night with the sea waters sparkling by the cold glow of moon...the waves touchin the heights...
The imaginary is very beautiful! A tanka-Juss five lines,but the picture drawn through,juss touchies the excellence.
Appericiated !

GOod visual of the ocean asif the moon's in the background. You mastered this form well . Well done Jen

This is a beautiful tanka!I liked it:)

This is a beautiful tanka!I liked it:)

Just one frosty spark -

^I like this opening. It sets a cool and night scene for the reader :)

pure preciousness of the moon
tumbles down swiftly;

^I also like the word "preciousness" you have
used to describe the moon...for she is precious and a beauty that cannot be touched.

"tumbles down swiftly"

^Interesting to imagine the moon tumbling down into the open arms of the ocean/sea...very nice!

Overall, I enjoyed this little nature write with such soothing images to take to bed...lovely read!