Agonizing Love (improved)
by Alex Mar 21, 2012
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Rain is the pain I pushed away, to cloud up my skies thick and gray, squeezed me out of my pretense faze, only to trap me in this saddened haze, sufficed by none, I love only one, but she left for more... nevermore, nevermore, I shall love nevermore. |
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14 years ago
by Mason Robb
You've got a nice flow Alex. You represent your emotions well, with a delicate balance between directness and metaphoric lines.
Call this personal taste. I believe poetry is nicer to read when it is set out in stanzas. It add's something to the flow and pace of a poem whilst allowing you to give your poem a build-up. -
14 years ago
by Alex
Open for criticism, I'm only started trying to write poetry last week..
