Comments : Sharp Edges

  • 12 years ago

    by Muran

    Excellent, great write.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    This is very crisp, i love how you incorporated a 'sharp object' to convey your thoughts. Very brilliant and beautiful. To me it seems in as much one is trying to persue an endeavour things fall back, back to square one. Nevertheless, though the subject is daring and tries to make ends meet no matter how it eludes him or her. He ends getting hurt along the way, getting into despair but with a will to win somehow though. My thoughts can absolutely differ from your source of inspiration but i enjoyed this short but powerful piece. KUDOS!!! Parley. Bless you :).

  • 12 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    Razor sharp poem, love it

    Best regards Ole

  • 12 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Doubt can often make us go through hell, TJ. Wisest thing is to just ask, to ask people what is going on. Often we think things that just aren't true and once we share our doubts, it gives the other the opportunity to take them away..and we free ourselves in the process:)

    Well done,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Wow, TJ.

    You are so awesome at metaphors. This poem is fantastic. I love the images portrayed and so much is said in the three stanzas!

    The first stanza makes me think of razors cutting you physically but really you're more talking about what is going on in the mind. I love how in the second stanza you say that a band aid is put in place which of course is only temporary. I know when my band aids are on and they need to come off the edges do curl and fold as if it is ready to come off. Though thinking in your poem I wonder if the bandaid should come off considering what could be underneath.

    The last stanza for me showed me what I was thinking could be underneath the band aid. I think you have done awesomely with this poem and I simply loved it!!!

    Brilliant job

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    This poem TJ is filled with deep emotion..... love this short packed poem....!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    I like how you specifically described everything related to cutting as I think, through different aspects, and in details. It's hard to look upon things from different angles, but you did.
    Awesome, TJ.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Wow!!! This is outstanding. I loved it! This is one of the best poems I have read on here in a long time and I will be adding it to my favorite poem section.
    Consider this nominated!

    Excellent

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by DarkLight

    T.J gud art.

  • 12 years ago

    by Karla

    TJ, my King

    Your poem drips metaphors and fantastic images. I simply loved it.Bravo!
    Bowing to my King - again!

  • 12 years ago

    by tainted melody

    This was very creative! Great job with your symbolisim :) Well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Love the language!

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Awesome poem, how did I miss this one?

  • 11 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Really really good it's great infact,, absolutely loved it,,amazing write 5/5 :)

    And I feel there's more reasons or I should say meanings to this poem,,hope everythings okay and may I say very creative

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is such a profound and engrossing piece. The words you use are indeed very sharp and cutting, it leaves a great impact on the reader and on their emotions as well. I love the image of the razor to highlight the realism of this doubt, how it takes away bits and pieces of the mind's imagination and dreams. I really liked the touch of the band-aid metaphor too, it was such a simple image, yet you tied it in well. It IS temporary, and sometimes the cuts underneath still leave scars, and the band-aids begin to curl.

    Incredibly deep, please keep this up!
    MaryAnne :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Lifeless Doll

    I really like your methaphors, your very creative I never would have thought it great job :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    TJ congrats on the win! So well-deserved, great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    What a metaphoric delight this poem is! This poem is a sad, metaphoric firecracker that just pops!!

    The title says it all and more, and I knew this was going to be a sad and touching piece.
    First stanza: the mind is a crazy time bomb that can go off at any moment, hence my reasons for calling this poem a fire cracker.

    Doubt can harm an imagination, leaving it stagnant and empty. Powerful emotions filled within this first stanza!
    Second stanza: Band aids are only temporary... Oh don't you just wish life had a huge permanent band aid that cured all? This stanza was so thought provoking!!
    Third stanza: Oh this ending stanza left me with emptiness... distrust and misconception can rip at the heart, leaving the inner "flesh" exposed, for sadness.
    Ending comment: I was so drawn to this poem for many reasons, but the main reason is when the author can say so much in so little, it has to be highlighted in my opinion... I loved this piece from start to finish! - well done TJ

  • 11 years ago

    by Blissful

    There was so much power and emotion packed into this compact piece. It was clothed with an ample amount of metaphors which was great! You used each word nicely here without having any fillers. Every word held an important part of your overall poem without anything being wasted or overused. Sometimes people go overboard with fancy words and whatnot, but I love that this poem was raw and stripped of all of that leaving the sheer sense of pure emotion. I LOVE how you branded blood with the color of distrust. How wonderful! Very creative indeed. Doubt and distrust usually go hand in hand. This poem left me with so many questions at the end and left me wondering. What was doubted? What brought on the distrust? Was it all just a misconception? I can go on and on. I like that this poem left it open for interpretation. Great job.