Comments : The New Me

  • 11 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    A very inspirational piece full of insight and profound message. 'God says with trails comes ease'. So as i always tell my folks, life is a mixture of the good; sweet, the bad; bitter and the ugly; sour. When we're in a despairing condition thus encountering diverse stages of dilemma then we tend to appreciate the rosy moments in our life. With such experiences whenever we're in contentment we then thank God for His grace and blessings knowing that He provides luxuries and also takes them as He wills. In as much as we're in an era where life is no more safe, chaos here and there differing in causes in all continents but life is still beautiful. To wake up and realise one is alive to witness another day; there's nothing lucky and rewarding as that. Though we differ in our faith, i'd once been explained about the meaning of 'faith like mustard seed' in the biblical aspect. To my understanding it means, even if ones faith is as small as the size of a mustard seed; one should be optimistic and hopeful that one day one will triumph. Lovely piece as usual of you with a smooth flow. Simply assimilative, bless you brother, Cheers! :).

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I do love inspirational and uplifting pieces such as this exquisite poem.... transformation is a beautiful thing...such as a Caterpillar to a butterfly. within this poem sings your heart of how you wish to fly- I love this poem-

  • 11 years ago

    by Illusion

    Lovely!!! My only inspiration comes from what I see in the future me...

  • 11 years ago

    by Illusion

    Lovely!!! My only inspiration comes from what I see in the future me...

  • 11 years ago

    by Illusion

    Lovely!!! My only inspiration comes from what I see in the future me...

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    When there is hope, there is always a new me. Lovely poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    An inspiring write! :) Loved these lines a lot...

    "i rose and moved the mountain,
    conquering, creating the new me "

    Thank you Paul for penning this piece...
    Very well written & expressed :)

    ~ Olwin

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    The new me... I like that, it sounds to me as a positive outcome like more confidence.

    Sometimes, I want a new me but that remains with pieces of the old me.. Lol. Pretty much I just want to improve and that's sound like what your poem means when you say the new me.. Improve.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    I have to say Paul that this is definitely a poem I can relate to. At the moment I am working towards a new me but sometimes it can be difficult to take the first step. I really think you have done awesome with this poem because a lot of people can relate to it in some way or another. I think that is wonderful. It is very inspirational and I hope that the new you that you are is the one that you want to be. Awesome job

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Very nice and well written

  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    'Dreams do come true,
    i say to myself after having
    witnessed my future me
    collide with the present me,'

    Having witnessed the future... That's thought-provoking. Perhaps you've dreamt of it, and dreams sometimes do let us see our future..

    'I longed for change,
    for a new beginning
    to a life i despised
    despite living it daily
    I suffered alone inside
    closed doors,
    with evil thoughts penetrating
    my mind, sprouting inside
    my brain and what was i to do?'

    The middle was great. It seems so hopeless.. evil thoughts penetrating your mind.. Maybe you're paranoid or depressed or maybe anxious, thinking of the worst possible scenario. So pessimistic, I can relate..

    'With faith like that of
    a mustard seed,
    i rose and moved the mountain,
    conquering, creating the new me'

    The ending is amazing. Really surprised me, to be honest. A mustard seed is so small, but with time and care, can grow.. Much like faith and God's kingdom.

    Love this piece. 5/5 :)

    -X

  • 11 years ago

    by marina14

    You put alot of effort in this peice its also very true :)rate this a 20

  • 11 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    New you is a wonderful poet & an amazing person. You have a gift of expressing yourself in such beautiful way that everyone could relate to it. Great write friend.

    all the best and take care

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    I loved how you hooked the reader in. I liked the fact that this poem was inspirational and relateable.I liked how you spoke of becoming postive and creating a new you even though there have been hardships. A great wite that is well penned and hopeful.

  • 11 years ago

    by Max

    This is rocking good

    "Dreams do come true,
    i say to myself after having
    witnessed my future me
    collide with the present me,
    creating the new me"

    this is a gr8 way to start the poem love it
    "witnessed my future me"
    i suggest it to be changed to
    "witnessed the future me"
    cause my future me doesn't make any sense or maybe its just me
    i love how u said that u combined your future self that u saw some how with your present self to create a new and mostly better you

    "I longed for change,
    for a new beginning
    to a life i despised
    despite living it daily"

    well we all want to change
    but the change u mentioned here was some different as it was life u already had but u don't like
    that seems so strange and sounds like u are depressed a lot

    "I suffered alone inside
    closed doors,
    with evil thoughts penetrating
    my mind, sprouting inside
    my brain and what was i to do?"

    now you are hopeless don't know what to do feeling powerless and unable to change a thing and feeling you are small being woooow this is amazing i love the mid of this poem its gr8

    "With faith like that of
    a mustard seed,
    i rose and moved the mountain,
    conquering, creating the new me"

    now u got your hope back u moved on and made the change u longed for
    totally amazing ending
    and amazing poem
    enjoyed reading this alot 5/5 keep writing =)

  • 11 years ago

    by East Poetry

    Loved it... especially the last stanza
    you should read my poem Faith. Great job on concurring self and being born anew.