Final Moments

Ohhhh I loved this!!

Mice turned to men...seriously loved this line and this opening stanza.

This whole poem showed a whole lot of creativity. I loved the use of "dust" when describing the planet...

My favorite line was We must love while we can. Things can so quickly change and crumble around us, we never know when our last day alive will be..what a true line.

Great job with this!

This poem was great. Starting with:

Mice turned to men
Babies died
Secret doors were revealed
Not so secret anymore

This was neat. Caught my attention and had me wandering what was going to happen next.

We danced through the night
Unaware
Unsuspecting
As the world fell around us

Then here the poem opened up more. It was like the world was coming to an end. yet the two lovers were unaware.

First and last breaths
Grasped tightly
Then set free
As the planet turned to dust

This was neat. I was seeing here the two lovers kissing. And I could picture them standing on a part of land bsically floating.

"It's just a sandstorm" they said
But we knew the truth
Having danced with death before
We must love while we can

And then the ending was great. Showing here that you must love while you can with the world falling around you. all in all a great write. :)