To my Unborn

"Everyday I miss the memories of what was
meant of your life"
Wow. Great start. The sorrow/grief of a mother to her child's death is one of the saddest things on earth.

"The purest joy of a kick could not compare
to anything else on earth"
This made me smile. I remember my mum telling me about when she was pregnant. I'll never forget the smile on her face for as long as I live :)

"My life became your life
My body became your thron
My heart became your lullaby
My blood became your essence"
Thron? Did you mean throne?
This is a beautiful stanza. So heart-warming.

"Your name became my favorite word
Your presence became my harmony
I no longer lived for myself but for you my
first child"
Well-written.

"The day the doctor had told me you had
taken your soul home, I felt a part of my life
end
Nolonger would i feel those oh so
welcoming kicks of what was to come and
reassurance"
Gawd. This is so sad. Really broke my heart.. I'm sorry.

"No longer would I be able to watch my
future, my world, my daugther grow
I wouldnt be able to hold your hand on the
first day of school
Teach you about boys and how to act like a
lady
Play hide and seek or house
Youd never smile your first smile or laugh
your first laugh
Youd never look up to my and say momma I
love you"
This is sad..

"Yourbody has decimated into ashes but
your memory and spirit live on"
I like the hope here.. The slight optimism

"Everyday I am reminded of the pain of
loosing you
I strive to be a better woman because of
you"
loosing should be losing.
Other than than, great word choice.

"Altho you are in a better place there is
nothing I wouldnt give to join you
What I wouldnt give for even a seco nd of
your presence. To be able to look down into
those beautiful eyes and tell you daugther
MOMMY LOVES YOU!!!!"
Altho should be although
I love the ending. The way you consistently had the emotion fill each word throughout the poem is amazing.

Great job! Keep writing :)

-X