"When darkness fall and you are all alone"
fall--falls

"You still long those beautiful old days, but in
vain"
Add 'for' between long and those.

"Unable to endure the pain so deep
You wake up at midnight and silently weep
Holding on the memories on your bruised
heart
You still try to mend your soul that has torn
apart."
The ending was beautifully-penned. The rhymes flowed well without destroying the emotions created. Great job 5/5 :)

-X

Wow, I would quote my favorite part like I normally do. but I would have to copy the whole poem on my comment!
I think this is amazingly well written, something almost everyone can relate to. Hauntingly beautiful.
5/5
Jenn.

What's so scary is that this is true <3

Wow. Very very touchy..your piece is full of emotion...the emotion is very powerful, i love the flows, the rhymes and the flows of your stuff...perfectly written..well, you got it gurl",5/5
keep writing more beautiful poems

Another beautiful piece by Little Mermaid!
Such a beautiful poem. Keep on writing these!!

I REALLY LOVED THIS, some time ago I went through a heart break and it really knocked me down. this poem really made me feel my heart bound faster as the words described me very clearly, like it was wrote for me, great job, one of all time favorite poems. How does one nominate a poem, some poems show where I can nominate it and some don't, do you know why, I wanted to nominate your next week!

I am so happy that i could jot down the emotions..and thanks a lot to the valuable comments and suggestions.

This poem is just too good.... U write everything the way u suppose to.. Excellence.

When you reach for Top, dress the floor. So you don't crumble, should you drop.. Good skills.