Loss of humanity

Amazingly written.

Each line of this write is valuable and it holds great emotions. I like the sudden change you have created in this poem from the second segment. Because at first view I thought this writing is about rape.

Nice work. 5/5

Amazingly written.

Each line of this write is valuable and it holds great emotions. I like the sudden change you have created in this poem from the second segment. Because at first view I thought this writing is about rape.

Nice work. 5/5

Thank you

"For the first second I could not breathe
For the second I felt completely weak
Filled with only fear inside
As I felt his stone like hand
Run up my thigh"
At first glance I thought this poem was about rape.
Very descriptive.

"I wanted to scream
It was a mixture of pleasure and pain
As his teeth sunk into the vein"
Then I got here ^^ Are you speaking of vampirism? If so so far so good. :)

"My life was ending in his arms
Yet I shed no tears for my humanity"

I love this line, very powerful.

Great write, 5/5
Jenn

Really well-written. This is about rape, I assume. If it is, I'm glad you didn't use the cliche: 'took away my innocence'. I'm really getting tired of that (lol)..
Hope all is well with you. Keep writing
-X