Comments : Release Me

  • 11 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Great short piece Maple. The imagery in this poem is teetering on the dark side. what a graphic scene your words paint :) Could have put it in dark-Yes, demons feeding on tears and souls. AWESOME!
    Lostlove

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    I loved how you played with sounds here.Excellent sista!Stellar!

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Really good, sounds mysterious yet a bit scary. I like that. When I started reading for some reason, I started picturing the girl running, in the middle of the street while looking to find her home. However, the road was foggy and someone was chasing her...

    Then the second part of the poem kicked in and I started picturing the word help.

  • 11 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Its soo dark it made me think, I love it:)
    <3

  • 11 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    Wow that was a really good poem, it had suspense in such a short poem too. and I also liked the style your words said so much in a short poem, i like ho dark you took it as well, when you said demons and lonely soul, its a well written poem :)

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    This is going to win the next week...I'm in love with everything you write Andrea...your words jusst reach to my very soul...

    great great amazing poetry

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Demons have a habit of trying to rob
    someones heart and soul
    You said it so beautiful

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    Wow!

    Such a powerful write for a short poem. I've been seeing that a lot lately and it is very inspiring. I love the simplicity in the words but come together they make an amazing write! A very sad piece indeed.

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    A short poem that speaks volumes!! I definitely enjoyed reading this, and I read it over and over again that I lost count haha.
    The first part/sentence painted a picture in my mind: a young girl walking home from school or work perhaps?---In the literal sense, but metaphorically speaking, it can be about a girl who has lost faith in God, perhaps. And she is lost, trying to find a "way back home". Really nice.
    "Release me from this ebony thought,"
    ---"these ebony thoughts" kind of sound better, I think.. This part made me think that this girl is somewhat paranoid while walking the streets (literally) or unwanted thoughts about the demons are haunting her because she's lost her faith in God.
    "for demons scatter to taste tear drops"
    ---This is my favorite part. Demons would do anything and everything to lead you away from God and watch you suffer. I like how you penned that here.
    The ending was powerful, but I was confused about the 'trees' part.. Hmm.. Perhaps it's a metaphor for nature or good people? But since I'm not so sure about my interpretation, I dunno.. lol.. My comment seems to be longer than the poem itself, but that goes to show this is a thought-provoking piece. For me it had double meanings and I like that. Really enjoyed reading this. Keep writing!
    -X