Comments : Duende

  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

    I SO loved this one by you, Mat! So brief yet perfect! a very very meaningful piece of art, that made me fall in love with words again <3 jeeze I am inspired this morning more than enough! and now your poem....I guess I'm going to write an essay here -.-

    You mastered the feelings and the flow was so smooth like a....well I don't know but I truly felt it perfect as no damn break distracted me not anything! rich and powerful!

    Like bees to their
    queen we flock to her--
    her irresistible charms
    and her duende comforting

    ^

    I LOVE
    the use of 'flock' here
    and bees are the best metaphor, well-done!
    but I guess you only needed one dash
    after 'her' right? and although
    irresistable is a cliche word
    I loved the insertion of it!
    so much passion....so much meaning.

    Like bishops to their
    god, we worship her--
    her incomparable beauty
    and her laughter divine

    ^^

    I Love the repetitions.....like bees like bishops..
    however wasn't a fan of repeating 'her'
    egh it just looked..her beauty
    her lips her nose....you know
    I just thought it's too much
    but oh
    who knows???
    maybe it was intentional!
    then applauds for that!
    I LOVE it when people describe our laughter
    lmfao..

    Like servants to their
    king, we obey her--
    her vegetarian ways
    and her spirit humane
    ^
    loved this part x100!

    Like humans to their
    planet, our lives are hers

    ^

    The most wonderful ending ever by you!
    jeezus!
    I totally adored the poem
    such a classic love poem
    that is simple
    and sweet and flowing so smoothly

    <333

  • 11 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    Beautiful and nicely written poem you have write here.

    Like humans to their
    planet, our lives are hers

    ^^ like this line and I like this poem , it is quite interesting. . . awesome poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Like bishops to their
    god, we worship her--
    her incomparable beauty
    and her laughter divine..

    this was brilliant bro, this is really great. Your words are amazing, your placing them and how they just flowed was wonderful. Great work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Beautiful and well written. I do like your
    style 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    "Like bishops to their
    god, we worship her--
    her incomparable beauty
    and her laughter divine"

    This is my favorite part..so lovely..so sweet. I have nothing to grasp any words to appreciate this..could I call it a precious poem? You're a very talented poet. This is wonderful!
    5/5
    ~C