Comments : Shatter the Adversary

  • 7 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Randy.

    Awesome. It is so nice to read a rhyming poem with such beautiful flow. But from you I expect nothing less lol Thank you for keeping rhyme alive here on this site. A wonderful tribute to someone on this site- I hope they get to read it. If I have votes consider yourself nominated hun. Very very beautiful poem Randy :)
    Lostlove~

  • 7 years ago

    by Randy East

    Yes...this poem was inspired by a fellow poet
    from this site.

  • 7 years ago

    by Kitty Kurse

    This is awesome! The poem flowed together so well, I could almost see this poem as a song. I loved the words and imagery you used.

  • 7 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Wow. The poem is flows smoothly and the imagery is great. I love the way you worded it. The scheme is clearly stated. Keep it up:))
    ~C

  • 7 years ago

    by Kitty Kurse

    "The adversary smothers you
    in an ever thickening shell.
    Adding layer over layer
    just to keep you in his spell.

    The spell of his temptations,
    every whisper that he makes,
    wants to blanket you in sadness
    cuase he wants to see you break."
    Great! It's so true, I can relate to this.
    Another very well penned piece.

  • 7 years ago

    by Jenn

    Wow! This poem is amazing!
    The flow is perfect, and I like the story. I never lost interest while I read. Minus one or two spelling error's this poem is great!

    5/5
    Jenn

  • 7 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    I loved this. Reminded me when I used to get picked on. This piece is so inspirational and a great help honestly. Beautiful, your flow was amazing. My fave. :)
    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Xanthe

    'you accomplish when your free.'
    you're

    'That your destine to be epic,'
    destined

    'In a vibrant of burst colors,'
    --in a vibrant burst of colors

    A really well-written piece. Keep it up
    -X

  • 7 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Sorry. Double post

  • 7 years ago

    by L

    I like the whole poem and the rhymes too.

    but the last line was the one that truly did it for me
    -let your wings stretch forth -

    I found so much inspiration within those few words, aim towards the future, and keep going open up and achieve, that's what those words mean to me. I actually there is more but in general that's how I can say them.

  • 7 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    The ending really did it for me.
    The wording was brilliant and the poem has been well written

  • 7 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    A wonderful piece Randy, truly great!
    I loved it and it Rhymed!! So pleased to see that!
    You are truly a Poet to be reckoned with, and a real Poet in every sense of the word! Well done!!!!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Janis

    Good job, well expressed and with awesome metaphors and even rhyming! Kept my attention till the end with ur good flow too ^^ keep it up!

  • 6 years ago

    by Rusheena

    This is fantastic! I love the rhythm; it could also pass as a song. It does seem that he has the best of us, when we're at our lowest, and we forget that it's only because we let him get the best of us.