Comments : Piece of Art

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Nana

    I am always so happy when you post something new...

    I love this, I think it is a simple piece...worded without fancy words that I have to look up to find the meaning, the flow is gentle and the rhyme is subtle and smooth.

    I like the way you described how you want to be portrayed, and that is such a beautiful thing, to know exactly what you want to be in art...

    Nana,
    Once again, you are AMAZING
    xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    Nana!

    How wonderful is this. Such a stunning piece.

    The images were awesome. I loved the whole nature aspect of what you have written. Especially with the rain and hurricane's. They have to be my favourite images of all.

    I believe you are trying to say that you want this person not to forget you. To treat you as if you were gone and express how they feel about you. I don't think at this point that you were already gone because of what you said in your last stanza. Draw me like I'm gone. As if it hadn't happened yet, though if it does, there will always be a part of you with them.

    I love this piece so much! I love the image of black and white. It reminds me of the classy olden love stories. Maybe this is a love that has been for a long time.

    Awesome write hun

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    I love the natural way of writing here..very simple, simple words and conveys sanity. The flows are purely manage with expertise...very impressive.

    I'll be your piece of art,
    draw me as the invisible
    end of the sea,
    the highest branch of
    an evergreen tree,
    shiniest ray of the sun,
    draw me with black and white,
    draw me like I'm gone...

    This is my favorite part in the poem. Every perspective angles of the poem reverberates the coolness of the message...with spark that contribute vividness in the whole piece...

    but know that I'll be your memory.

    And I love the way you end your stuff too. Really amazing. Well done:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Illusion

    I always love it simple, and you bring out a masterpiece out of simplicity.. Kudos.

  • 11 years ago

    by Illusion

    I always love it simple, and you bring out a masterpiece out of simplicity.. Kudos.

  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    I like this because it is new from you. Will comment laterrrrr!

  • 11 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Geeh, I really like this, Nana.

    For the first time I see a woman in between the lines, instead of a girl:) Must be because it's your birthday :p

    This is really strong and feminine, a real power-girl statement. Phew, I so loveeeee strong women:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 11 years ago

    by Jeff Weiner

    How cool and true.... well worded

  • 11 years ago

    by Lioness

    Woo Hoo!!! Congratulations on your awesome win!!!

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    You're words are simply endearing and beautiful. I love your poems Nana, you're marvelous. Remain blessed dear, :-) ...

  • 11 years ago

    by Decayed

    Of course I loved this.. so much.. but I think there are poems that you have there that should win, too :)

    Your Arabic version is awesomer that this, by soooooo much! <3

    Keep writing, please

    • 11 years ago

      by Sunshine

      Awwwww thnk you Aboudie ! <3 :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    The author of this fantastic beauty has designed a powerful, poetic painting.

    The title is so beautiful for I feel that poetry is an elegant art... love the title.

    I adore the first stanza, with its richness and creative forms of expressions- very romantic. The starting line;

    "Write me like a poem" <--------- Mouth dropping and passionate start to this poem.

    The nature tones are so beautiful- The author in my opinion is asking for someone to write of her aura and beauty or memory of; I can't express how exquisite the second stanza is..

    The touching and powerful ending is just magical- Asking a lost love to write and create art in her memory- Mercy! This truly is a piece of art.

    The entire poem from start to finish is an elegant painting of emotions, mixed with a beautiful display of words. Well done Ms Sunshine