OH WOW LIZ

I felt like you had written everything I wanted to write, I just had this connection throughout that I could feel what you were describing...

When you do that, damn it makes me cry

An amazing poem...

OMG!!!! No seriously! OOOOMMMMMGGGGG!!

Though the darkness
that haunts your mind,
seems to pay me
visits as well.
^^
that felt so dark, scary, and shows how connected you both are.

But then you say this...

"Though I must
admit, knowing
that you lose yourself
the same way as I
makes it a little easier
to deal.

Only just a little."
^^
and I go like, wooooooooooooooow. That made me speechless to be honest. I stopped here and went to read it again from the start.

And yet again, I always feel I can relate to your pieces in some way. Uninvited thoughts? I have these, they haunt down every night until I surrender to their insanity or I fall asleep.

Great piece Liz.

I don't know why I can relate to 90% of your poetry. I always feel poems, appreciate them, learn them by heart but so special how you penned some of my hidden sadness with ease and realism. I love your simple wording that never failed painting what you suffer in my mind.
'Though I must
admit, knowing
that you lose yourself
the same way as I
makes it a little easier
to deal.'

^

makes = make.

Nominated next week (if nobody already did.)

Go haead and take it, this poem has gripped my heart, 100/100

:-( ......... *tissues* I apologize, because I'm not going to give a full blown comment... this touched me so much im teary... beautifully sad....

This is indeed a sad and beautiful
piece written

Sweet poem love the titel aswell

If I could be your
saviour and protect
you from yourself
I would.

--- I found this stanza to be really sweet and caring. I also found this sad because the way it started with the "if" makes it sound like you can't help or that it doesn't depend on you.

Though the darkness
that haunts your mind,
seems to pay me
visits as well.

--- This is really interesting,
I mean that you can also feel the same way as that other person and I'm guessing that's the reason why you can't exactly "protect" that someone. How can you protect or be the savior of someone if you also are going through the same state?

And each time it
crosses my path,
I'm left with the
certainty that
these uninvited
shadows have
more control
over me than
I do myself.

--- Yeah, that's what I though. Those shadows are getting in the way. I like that you used darkness and shadows. Though, the shadows in the darkness cannot be seen but they are there hidden. That makes this more powerful in my opinion. The person is covered by the shadows and hence it's more dark. ( just using my imagination)

Though I must
admit, knowing
that you lose yourself
the same way as I
makes it a little easier
to deal.

Only just a little.

--- In here, the way I understood it is that knowing that you are not the only one going through the same, makes it more easier to deal with because both have experienced the same and thus can understand the feeling and relate to each other.

We are swimming in
the same ocean,

merely it's spring time
where you are and
the autumn winds
are howling beneath
my window,

-- I'm trying to understand this part,
So this person is far away from you,. . I'm having a hard time understanding why is autumn in Australia.. rather I can't seem to digest that info. It might sound silly but it took me a while to deal with time zones. lol

just enough
that my lips
and breath
catch a glimpse
of your pain.

I wonder, how are we
going to survive
if these thoughts
keep breaking in

uninvited.

--- I like the wondering part, it leaves the reader in suspense and it also allow us to ponder on the subject. I have found that some of your poems are vague and that it doesn't state the reason or anything in specific for instance " what type of shadows are you referring to... that could tell the reader why you are feeling like this... But that vagueness makes the reader relate to the poem even more.

Amazing write, Liz.

Well what I love about your poetry, that its always about your real feelings with an amazing touch of creativity.
The title captured my attention. I'm also touched, another awesome write by you:)
Wish you the best<3

"If I could be your
saviour and protect
you from yourself
I would."

I love how this started with 'if', it gave this a hopeful/hopeless tone.
My only advice here would be a comma after 'yourself' to give it more clarity and make the flow better. But I love how you started this piece.

"And each time it
crosses my path,
I'm left with the
certainty that
these uninvited
shadows have
more control
over me than
I do myself."

A beautifully penned stanza. The echo of the title here made it more powerful. And as already stated, the vagueness worked so well here. I don't mind that it's obscure because that added to this piece's sad tone and atmosphere. Great job

"Though I must
admit, knowing
that you lose yourself
the same way as I
makes it a little easier
to deal."

As I can relate with this piece (and with a few others' poems in this site), I understand what you mean here. Knowing that someone else is feeling that way, makes it easier because you know you aren't alone, and someone understands. It eases the pain and sadness.
But this stanza seems cut short. "...makes it a little easier to deal.." 'with' would work, I think.

"We are swimming in
the same ocean,
merely it's spring time
where you are and
the autumn winds
are howling beneath
my window,"

I love the metaphor here. Instead of simply saying that he's in a different time/place, the incorporation of seasons showed the difference when you look out your window, and he look out at his. Creative.

"I wonder, how are we
going to survive
if these thoughts
keep breaking in
uninvited."

The repetition of the title here made this more powerful. But in place of the period, I think it would be better if you ended this with a question mark to heighten the importance of the question.
Overall, I enjoyed reading this though it is sad. Hope all is well. Keep writing :)
-X

You know that I am very fond of your poetry because in its poetic simplicity, it can move mountains in me.

Such a remarkable one!

This in a way is dark, somewhat creepy, and I absolutely LOVED this one!!...the title is simple and I thought needed no more words to describe it! I'm glad you added the title as your last word! It made this poem bolder.

Excellent work Liz, youre right, thoughts are uninvited and uncontrollable!

Thoughts are definitely uninvited, sometimes you just can't keep them away! Excellent poem. 5/5

Ohhh Liz. This is AMAZING.

I've read this over and over now and I find a new feeling each time I read it. This particular time, it's just the raw vulnerability. The "look, I know we both feel this way, we have to do something about it or walk away" type feeling is what strikes me most.

I love the realistic approach you took to this, and I feel like this is definitely a poem a lot of people can relate to. I know I can, and it just hits home for me. Amazing!

Wow,,breath taking,,I love it,,amazingly written, ,all of it is soo great and fantasticly done,,a very interesting point :) 5/5