Awesome darkness Karla, but somehow I still can feel pain behind each powerrful line. Well done as always
lostlove

Well done Karla. Very powerful. It is almost like you went down deep and threw these words out on the page because you were so angry with the person. Were you venting here?

My favorite part would have be:

"I really do not care if life runs over you
or if you irresponsive and irresponsible heart stops beating.
People like you are mourned by darkness."

These three lines are the ultimate lines. Throw that in someones face, and I am sure that you will leave them speechless for a little bit. They had emotion packed into them-you summed up the whole poem in these last three lines. It shows your contempt most beautifully :)

Excellent poem (Miss you in TKR even though I didn't really know you. Wish you were still there )
5/5

Wonderfully Done Karla!!!

My...my...such darkness and bitterness behind your words yet there is a tinge of sadness too, to see this person become like this perhaps..? It is
like you have completely given up on this person and care no less..the darkness you have created with your words just comes alive! Hope all is well with you..take care.

I love this poem Karla.

It's like what you wrote here you wrote out of anger and frustration, as if you wanted this person to read what you wrote so they know how you feel about them now. I thought it was awesome!

x

I don't know if this was written from a personal experience, or from someone else's perspective. Hope all is well (:
But either way, the emotion you poured out in this piece is so raw and genuine, I could feel the anger, bitterness and as everyone has said, a hint of sadness here and there. I also love your diction and choice of lexis.
Lines such as:
'I swapped you for an old edition of Kama
Sutra
long before I could say goodbye to
tolerance.'
^ Really stood out (for me at least :) and it really showcases your talent.

This is really amazing. Keep writing!
-X