"Few precious moments lost in time
where you will truly there, be mine" - favorite lines.

I loved that it rhymed, a wonderful dreamy poem. 5/5

mandy :)

Great job, really can't get enough of your metaphors! Sad, yet so sweet, loved it, keep it up!

Sorry, double post, stupid phone -.-

What an absolutely beautiful poem, I actually got chills shooting through my back when I read the last stanza. This poem thus further confirmed why you are bright star among my favorite poets on this site.

Amazing!

D way dis poem starts wid such a beautiful scenery..
Wow, peter..i wish i cud rhyme like u.
Bt seriously, i didnt like d end..i mean i dnt like sad endings..bt dis poem ..awesum..pure beauty

Great poem, great Rhymes hence your post about rhyming, however, (I didn't want to use BUT)

First line of second stanza doesn't read right "me to leave" should 'me' be there or am I missing the point?

Should it be "to leave me?" which then doesn't rhyme with grieve.

Only my view, do with it what you like

regards

Darren

Hi Darren, many thanks for your comments.

I write poetry in an old fashioned 'romanticised' way of placing words together, and in this style,
'if you were ever me to leave' is entirely appropriate for this writing style.
'If you were to leave me', would not be right for this 'romaticised' poem. (far too 21st Century!)
My style of words is much in keeping with Poets of 100 or so years ago.
(it's not that I emulate their style, but words 'just come out of me' that way, very 'romanticised' and old fashioned.)
Wordsworths poem with his words, 'I wandered lonely as a cloud' is written in a similar 'romanticised' style.
I guess I'm just an old fashioned poet when it comes to words!
Peter..

You r a gud writer im waitng for ur next poem

Stunning images you have painted with your words. The ending is a bit sad.

Well written.

England I thought I commented this before. I read it again tonight in a less noisy environment and saw it in a brand new light. It was nice to read you again my friend. Whoever this is written for sure is a lucky lady to have such a beautiful poem written about her :)Really great rhyme and flow and it had a tranquil easy feel to it. Rhyme on Peter!
Lostlove~

Very expressive.
It made me picture something somewhat of two young lovers in a beautiful field...
so happily in love. :)

5/5

When reading your poems I can see why you love rhyming ones so much, Peter. They somehow suit you best.

This was lovely, yet with a sad layer underneath.

Well done, a really beautiful poem:)

5/5 Ingrid

WOW amazing totally loved this piece.
Great, and everything flowed.

I'll lay you down on golden leaves
we'll 'moonlight bathe' by silver trees
And there at last all words long done
two silhouettes will merge as one"

My favorite line its just so Great :)

Great Write Peter!!!

Raw motives, pure intentions, I like your imagination! Thanks for sharing a little bit of your thoughts, I delved right into your mind and could envisage the beauty of such special moment. Great piece PP!

I admire pure love and when the feelings are expressed you can never missed the emotions! This is a lovely write. Makes me wanna fall head over heels in love.

Beautifully written. It's the second one of your's that I've read so far and as time permits, I'm looking forward to reading many more. An enjoyable read indeed.. Keep up the good work.

Your poems always seem to warm my heart and fill me with so much emotion. I love this poem so much.

Hello Peter,

This wonderfully written. Its flow and language a joy to read.

A tribute to love. A love that is wholesome. But, with all love it has that fear of being without it.

A great poem Peter.

Take care

Michael

Peter,
The more I read your work, the more I realise that you and I share a love for rhyming romantic poetry - the kind not seen too often in these unromantic times of ours.
This is a stunning little piece that was a real pleasure to read.....and read again!
All the very best
Ben