Beautiful, that's all I can say

Wow, the words are perfect and so is the visual display!

First, I like the form... It really reflects the elegance of your poem... magical :)

I loveeeeeeeeeeee how it's shaped!

Ohh It looks amazing!! And reads amazing too :-)

MaryAnne,*

The form of this poem is pretty to look at but to be honest I didn't find it to be appealing when reading. It seemed to make my eyes dart across a little too quickly but that's probably just me. I do like the shape however; I think it was cleverly done and created a nice image.

I really liked the reference to heat waves, it's funny I was working on some poetry last night and heat wave was a term I was fooling around with. I don't hear it often in poetry.

A few terms/lines that really stood out to be where:

"willow lips"
"Summer portraits"
"feeling the spaces between their breaths"

These were all really quite beautiful and had a relaxing earthy element to them. You write nature poetry well, I'd love to read more of this style by you. I think your words really altered by atmosphere; this poem was tranquil and made me feel calm. Lovely work, MaryAnne.
-Mel