My Angel

Definitely dark and absolutely amazing. Wow. Just wow. :) great write.

There are, indeed, those who see good in the world and want it for themselves. I'm not sure if it could be defined as evil, but it's certainly childish. Only after the innocence has been corrupted, and the purity they wanted for only themselves is lost, do they see that it was a grave mistake. It might be selfishness, though, and not real remorse. This is my favorite piece of yours so far, 5/5

This was deep and thoughtful. A lil different.
Keep writing(:

Hi there, this was a good piece of writing which I enjoyed reading.

Your title was nice and short and fitting with the poem.

A few errors to fix :

The opening line : Finnally i have you under my skin
- Finally only has one N.

Also the line:
Her beauty and tranquilty capture my heart
- spelling error - TRANQUILITY.

You use very strong words such as : devouring, cowering, tattered, all of which make your poem unique.

The part which touched me most was :
Don't weep my angel, you're safe with me
Lost in the shadows, forever we'll be
- these lines were very moving and stood out the most for me.

Well done.

I like this poem, My only suggestion is to capitalize the I's. Other than that I like the read and the story line as well.

My favorite part was the " opposites attract..in this case, I'm sure"

Because it's true, opposites do attract, I don't know why.