SAD

by jodyann mcintosh   Aug 14, 2012


HOT TEARS STING MY FACE
I TRY WIPING THEM AWAY, BUT THEY COME AT A FAST PACE
THEY CLOUD MY EYES AND SO IT'S HARD TO SEE
MY HEART IS HEAVY AND THIS PAIN IS KILLING ME

SADNESS....THIS DISEASE THAT INFECTS MY HEART....MY SOUL
IT WILL EAT ME AWAY UNTIL I'M NO MORE
IT HURTS SO BADLY AS IT SLOWLY SPREADS
DEEP ROTTING PAIN.....TAKE IT AWAY I BEG

I SUFFER BECAUSE OF YOU
AND HERE I THOUGHT YOU WERE ALL MY DREAMS THAT CAME TRUE
SILLY GIRL AND HER FAIRYTALE LOVE....
IT WAS ALL AN ACT, AND YOU PLAYED WELL MY LOVE

THE PAIN IS WORSE NOW....AND I CALL OUT TO YOU
BUT YOU HAVE TURN YOUR BACK...MY BABY...MY BOO...
I REACH OUT FOR YOU, BUT YOU REFUSE TO TAKE MY HAND
SO MY LOVE HAS LEFT.....ALONE I STAND

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  • 13 years ago

    by A Poets Handwriting aka ALISHA

    You have expressed your emotions well.

    Favourite line;
    'silly girl and her fairytale love...'

    ^^ We tend to dream about love based on fiction rather than reality, and it only disappoints us in the end.

    Critiques;
    In the last stanza; second line
    'turn' should be 'turned'

    I think that the capitalisation of the poem makes it a little disorienting to read. Capitalising words should offer them power or anger but by using it for the entire piece, it has diminished that power.

    A really good write.

    • 13 years ago

      by jodyann mcintosh

      I just saw the mistake, i write so fast I sometimes forget to capitalize my work and thus the simple mistakes. I will do better next time :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Tushar Das

    Good work.... Its heart touching... I guess you are also a broken hearted

    • 13 years ago

      by jodyann mcintosh

      Yes i have been, i wrote this a year ago after my boyfriend decided he wanted to be single.

  • 13 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Where offense is found, Love is bound. What repels, is not meant to be.

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