Its sad what happened to those children. And you express it well in this form.

Even though it's sad to know what this write is about, I feel, for some odd reason, that you were confident while writing this senryu. Perhaps it's the scene you painted in my head or maybe your own tone that made me feel this....the use of dolls? Maybe.

I couldn't agree more that this August is truly an ugly month. Too many deaths and broken hearts. May all of their souls rest in peace.

Dunno if you care but 'life' in your note should be in plural.

An awesome job you've done here, Jenni. I'm loving all of your recent work. Keep writing.

May their souls rest in peace and may their families find love in each others arms

Its very sad, May their souls rest in piece.

Beautiful dedication hon.
xxx

May their Souls Rip, a beautiful dedication J
5/5

A great dedication jenni, very moving piece written very well.

I love this dedication, Jenni although it is saddening, it's definitely an eye-opener.

The title is clever. I think it is what they (the children's families) did, which caused their deaths? I'm not sure but it is powerful and it does stand out.
I found it creepy how you've written 'wide-eyed', it connotes shock and fear.
I liked the metaphor of dolls being the children, since they both share the same aspect of being innocent.
Second verse: I think it would be necessary to capitalise the first letter of August? Since it may be mistaken as the adjective. :)
I love the word 'suspired' here. It's strong and adds to the haunting tone. It injects this piece with reality without holding back..
The ending is just magnificent. I did picture black curtains dropping for the final time as the play ended. But at the same time, it conjures up sad feelings. And it shows finality; it really is 'the' end.