Finally Won

by Talia   Sep 23, 2012


I smear on a smile
And brush on emotion.
No one will know I'm sad tonight.
No one will know the pain of my life.
I walk through the door
With a swing in my step.
A convincing smile is painfully placed
The presence of anger, carefully erased.
Laughing and dancing
No sign of him tonight.
I brush off my fears and let in the light.
As soon as I think everything is fine
I suddenly hear the most painful line.
I love you.
Everything is silent
I turn to his face.
For you in my heart there is no place.
The truth comes out
My feet have turned numb.
My heart skips a beat, I've finally won.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow, this is really powerful. I have one suggestion because I believe it will help the power of your poem.

    I suggest you single out the line " I love you" because like you state in your poem, it is so painful for you to hear this, it owuld emphasise this to have it standing on its own like this :

    As soon as I think everything is fine
    I suddenly hear the most painful line.

    I love you.

    Everything is silent
    I turn to his face.

    - this is just my opinion though.

    I can relate to how you have described pretending to be ok, and the fake smile you wear. You described this well. Also liked the flow and casual rhyming of the poem.

    I thought you done a good job on this poem and look forward to reading more from you.

  • 13 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Sighs............. the feelings of emptiness and yearning to hear the words from the one we love is powerful! It does make us feel like we have won... and yet there is so much sadness within this write... I do love your form of expression! Powerful write!