This poem was reli good! I liked it a lot.
From the part: What was I supposed to do with that?
As hard as I tried
I couldn't hide
From those words and I was blind to the fact
Of how I was so absurd
That it was way past midnight
There was no golden carriage
And the pumpkin was in a thousand pieces
Just check the rhyming, went a lil off there
But all in all this is a beautiful piece I am sure everyone
Will love it!
I loved this.. You tried to create a movie like scene out here keeping the musical touch intact... Also, you quite convinced the fact that life is not a fairytale and that we cannot long live in that myth ignoring the reality.
And to be accustomed with the real, being practical is so hurting and abstract...
Yes, at places the rhythm went a bit off, but you managed your best to keep this brilliant!!!
I loved it truly... :)
6 years ago
Beautifully written I am a sucker for fairytales and I found this write to be magical. I like that you mention sometines we accept anything to have a pictures or fantasies that only exist in our minds. Excellent.
I think because the poem is so deep in all directions and thought provoking and heart taking... it should be be nominated. You rocked it!! You smacked it!! you explode it....you did it. What can I say? I really became speechless. Thank you so much for sharing such a marvelous piece. You are really brilliant.
Awh this poem made me want to cry! it's soo good! this poem has no words to describe except AWESOME!!!!! ^^ i especially love this stanza
I dressed you up as Prince Charming
But you, short, dark and with a bottle of Jack in your hand
Could not live up to the part I had conjured up in my head
And I'll never forget
After I played your princess, what you said:
"I think I just stole what belonged to another man"
since this is awfully real in true life it hurts but it's true so WOW i loved this poem! :) and i love the fact that you put yourself in the poem too! :) 5/5