Comments : Blue blue go away

  • 9 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    This piece was very touching and comforting ..... I adore friendship poems, because for me its a friend expressing their love and compassion for another... its a beautiful gift and when someone is attacked by the blues, nothing says it better than a poem of hope...

    I also want to say that its comforting to the reader who may be experiencing some blues of their own... its very comforting read!!

    I adored the ending rhyme couplet... It was a nice added touch to this piece...
    very nice!!

  • 9 years ago

    by L

    A lone soul, this was a great poem, it can sure lift someone's from feeling down specially that it's coming from a friend to a friend. so I hope your friend reads this poem.

    The intentions are clear that you care for this young lady who is your friend and also it shows how you see this lady as beautiful and smart and that you wish to see her happy and not depressed. The way it's written, it's more like for a younger sister type of tone and I like that.

    My favorite lines where the last ones

    blue blue go away! I pray
    never to return another day

    Very good.

    • 9 years ago

      by A lonely soul

      Thank you Andrea and Luce for your wonderful comments. I am sure our young friend (name will not be disclosed) will be happy to see all of us penning her a message through this poem.
      You might wonder where the Blue blue go away.....remember "Rain rain go away..", :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Omg this is an amazing piece. I dunno why Im sooo touched, I feel like crying too, lol.
    This so warm and sweet, I LOVE friendship dedications, and this is one of the best I've ever read:)
    When I read the title" Rain rain go away" came to my mind,
    Thank you for sharing this, 100% sure it'll help your friend, and she's gonna love it, more than anyone else^_^

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This is a wonderful friendship poem, I love how easy it is to see your heart here.

    Tears falling down beautiful eyes
    I so wish I can wipe them dry

    ^^ This is a lovely start. It's simple and sweet, it pulls people in and it really shows where this piece is going to end up.

    Can't see the pain on my friend' face
    Can't imagine the inner suffering

    ^^ Knowing someone in any sort of pain is hard, especially when they are far or young, or in some other way improbable to help.

    Oh how I wish for an early spring
    To say goodbye to this winter of gloom

    ^^ I have to say I really like this stanza. The description is almost artsy in a way. to a degree it seems cliche' but oh well, its still wonderful. And a good visual of the friends inner being at the moment.

    I know you have the inner strength
    The will to conquer the biggest blues

    ^^ This one shows a loving or caring hand, the encouragement most people need to get through "hard" times.

    Beauty and wisdom you already have
    A dream to succeed is what you need

    ^^ More of the encouragement as well as a simple complement to cheer anyone up. Nice touch. I really like the sound of this one by the way.

    You will always be in my heart
    Cherished even when we are oceans apart

    ^^ That's sweet, I love how you show just how magnificent of a friend you have and how much they truly mean to you.

    You have given me a friend's love
    One day, I will have that warm embrace

    ^^ Excellent stanza. Not much I can say about it though. Sorry.

    Until then, my young friend
    Fight the demons within

    ^^ The farewell is on its way, but this is wonderful. the simplicity is a great choice here.

    Every day, every minute
    'Till they haunt you no more

    ^^ This reminds me of a song I loved when I was little, but now that I think of it I cannot remember the name of it. Either way, its sweet.

    I wish to see a big smile one day
    On a young lady's lovely face

    ^^ Marvelous! Shows just how important this friend's happiness truly is to you.

    Blue blue go away! I pray
    Never ever to return another day

    ^^ Beautiful ending. Love it. Stunning.

    This piece is magnificent. It is a wonderful, simple, beautiful friendship work. Your voice is loud and clear here. Your heart is shown well, and its obvious its in the right place. Your word choice is fantastic. All in all, phenomenal piece! Anyone is sure to love it and then some.

    P.S. great job on the flow.

    5/5 of course


    • 9 years ago

      by A lonely soul

      So glad my young friend that you like it. She is just like you, near and dear to me. And so your words bring out emotions in me.

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    This is one friendship poem that is sure to touch
    anyone who is experiencing troubling time..I so wish that your friend reads this and gets the strength she really does prayers are with her...take care.