Freedom

by Jared Allen   Oct 22, 2012


Sitting here swallowing the darkness I built,
Knowing there should be feelings of guilt.
It's like a nightmare not knowing if I'm living in reality,
Not being scared knowing this could end in fatality.
Watching myself standing alone in the distance,
Screaming as they walk by but no one is listening.
It's grabbed me so tightly I can't breathe,
Clinching my eyes chanting I have to believe.
Peering down the hall watching the grim reaper stride in,
Realizing something is about to begin.
To my surprise who they call death,
Is a portrait of myself and takes away my breath.
I have lived so long not knowing which path,
If picked wrong it will cause chaos and wrath.
There is a light ahead dimly shining,
Cautious I creep it starts to get blinding.
I get to the end not sure if I should step through,
To my surprise it's a beautiful it's view.
Nervous to see all the happiness and joy,
Holding back not sure if it's a decoy.
Help is there to wash away my demons,
Understanding now there is freedom.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Good usage of wording, love your style and the meaning that lies behind in your writing. The only thing I would suggest is perhaps breaking this up into stanzas. Other than that, good work.

  • 10 years ago

    by Natalie

    I absolutely LOVED this poem. It is so real! The feelings you relate are so human and so easy to relate to that it almost becomes hard to read. I had to stop at some points and take a breather because I know exactly what you mean.

    "Watching myself standing alone in the distance,
    Screaming as they walk by but no one is listening."

    These 2 lines, for example, really hit home with me. All I can say is life! Hasn't everyone felt like this at some point? Alone, misunderstood. You do a brilliant job of making your reader grasp what you are trying to say. These 2 lines were my favorite.

    I also have to commend your rhyming, it makes the poem flow extremely well. It's not always easy to rhyme feelings but you did an exceptional job and the reader leaves understanding your story.

    Thanks for sharing and please keep writing.

    10/5 from me!

  • 11 years ago

    by christine marie

    This poem really touched home!

  • 11 years ago

    by christine marie

    This poem really touched home!

  • 11 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    Great poem I like the flow of this piece and find it to be inspirational. I think that the opening and ending is what makes it inspiring. Great poem.

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