Untitled, Temporarily

by MyHalozChokinMe   Oct 24, 2012


I wonder what you
see in her-

Maybe it's that
you don't need a
psych degree
to work out what
she's thinking,
how she's feeling.

(Me, on the other hand,
happy - silent,
sad - laughter,
angry - smiles,
healthy self-
expression is
NOT my forte.)

But you can be certain-

When I'm
stammering
stuttering
stumbling
around
the truth is
bubbling,
seeking its escape
only to die on
my lips,
coldly,
violently.

More to the point -
What don't you see
in her?

Me?

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  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Are you aware ( or maybe it is just me ) that the shape of this poem looks like an injection?

    The message of the poem is good, I was trying to think of a title because it needs one. I am sturggling too. I am thinking along the lines of judgement or impressions, because it seems to be he see's what is first impressions and prefers them to what he finds out is underneath, if that makes sense?

    Anyway, well done and keep them coming.

    • 11 years ago

      by MyHalozChokinMe

      Thanks Baby R.

      I'm still waiting for an epiphany in regards to the title...

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wonderful piece... I like the title as it matches with the content...:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I've wrote stuff like this a time or two in my life and I hate that feeling.....wondering what he sees in another girl that you don't have, when really the one asking the questions has more than the one that's wanted...

    Yuck. This poem brings back memories, but Imust say I do love this. Loved the ending question!

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