Atomic

by MyHalozChokinMe   Nov 11, 2012


I am swimming in atomic love.

An explosion of pure, untainted release
set to green afterglow in the sky,
fallout snow settling over
the cracked earth.

There is no fission here.

No separated atoms.

We are atomic love, wild in its
brilliance, taken by it's rapture.

I only have half the time to live this
half a life but I'll live it with you
under endless winter.

Dance with me to a waltz of fire and
ash and when the world collapses, all
we have left is us.

I need the soft melodic sound of nothing,
an end to long work days, I need to revel
in empty streets and hallowed out caves.

I am spellbound by this reaction,
billowing mushroom clouds,
blackened earth,
your neon eyes.

My nuclear dream.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Glad you liked the interpretation ^^,

    • 11 years ago

      by MyHalozChokinMe

      Okay...

      Back to comment a bit further-

      1. As I mentioned before, I appreciate the fact that you pick up on the physics and scientific jargon.
      Most people will read about fission and continue through the piece, not really understanding what I am saying.

      Same definitely goes for "half life."

      Your interpretation, again, is dead on.
      Time is relative and is of no bearing on how long I would honor this person with myself.

      2. Refreshing that you also pick up on the contradiction at the end. And you are correct, the contradiction was a merely an attempt at explaining the intensity of my feelings, even if this energy is similar to that of a drug induced high :P

      Thank you again for your comment.

  • 11 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Back to the comment.

    I am swimming in atomic love.

    ^ This was a thinker. Is every atom of the author attracted to his/her lovers atom?. .or is every atom of the author excited about love?. .

    There is no fission here.

    ^ Means there is no division. No splitting.

    I only have half the time to live this
    half a life but I'll live it with you
    under endless winter.

    ^ Half life in physics is used to describe the property of radioactive decay. The author is conveying to his/her lover, that what little time he/she has will suffice and that he/she would like to spend it with the lover. Time is relative and need not be used to measure the length of their love.

    I am spellbound by this reaction,
    billowing mushroom clouds,
    blackened earth,
    your neon eyes.

    My nuclear dream.

    ^ Here is the sweet contradiction. Unless there is a fission, there can be no mushroom clouds. Thus no nuclear dream. But, perhaps the author is merely describing the intensity of their love as such, comparing it to a nuclear detonation. Immensely bright, an emotional burst of uncontrollable energy. i.e affection. Although, technically it is just the release of pheromones, dopamine, norepinephrine, and serotonin, which act in a manner similar to amphetamines, stimulating the brain's pleasure center, causing fluctuations on the heart beat, creating serene pleasure.

    Sorry for the specifics. I have a soft corner for science. And do correct me If I am wrong.

    Very well written. Loved it.

    • 11 years ago

      by MyHalozChokinMe

      I'm not home right this second, but wanted to take a second to tell you that I am so impressed with your break down of this!

      I am smiling, knowing that you totally caught the use of half life!!

      I will be back in a bit to comment further.

      Thank you =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Awesome......i dont think i've ever read a poem like this before....and it blew me away...seriously i love you !

  • 11 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Damn, you used Nuclear Physics in a love poem. Hot!

    Will have to come back and post a better comment, first thing in the morning.

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