Autumnal Equinox

by MyHalozChokinMe   Nov 13, 2012


Nowhere else have I
gone, nothing have I
seen, since you landed
with a stomp on
my solitude.

Ground becomes sky,
mind becomes heart,
both become stomach
when you're around.

If I accomplish
nothing more
in this life,

I have loved you-

And a fate as
sweet as your
face has been
mine since that
day in late
Autumn.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    Love the use of 'stomp'

    creates real anguish, great flow and imagery and real passion throughout.

    I agree with Harlea, the last stanza is fantastic, it is virtually a poem on it's own.

    nominated

    • 11 years ago

      by MyHalozChokinMe

      Thank you Darren.

      Your comments are always welcome and appreciated...

  • 11 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Lol you're welcome :P

  • 11 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Hmm... Late Autumn?

    • 11 years ago

      by MyHalozChokinMe

      Ah...I got it. And thank you...your suggestion actually helped me :P

  • 11 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Last stanza? Perfect! Gosh, this was lovely also Cara. Beautifully written. Amazing job<3 Nominating definitely

    • 11 years ago

      by MyHalozChokinMe

      Thank you Harlea. <3

      Not sure what to call this yet...

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