The way I interpreted this piece...

Someone got in between the relationship and destroyed it. However, my thoughts are the relationship was already weak and it was already sought to die. The vulture was patient enough to wait and the end result was a lost in the relationship towards the end.

I really like the way you incoporated the vulture. And pretty much the personification.

I agree with Luce... Cuz I interpreted the same way.... I love the creativity of having a vulture... A different tangent to relationships poem.... The pain was intense in here and the ending is fab...
Great piece:)

Jenni this was such a unique piece, I'm so happy to read a new one from you :)

I loved the imagery of the vulture through this piece, it provided that basic that there is always an ambush for this person. It was vivid, and very heartbreaking to think this relationship, this bond, was so broken, and became so distant. The part that really caught my interest was when you were talking about the vulture sweeping in and taking apart the symphony of their hearts....all that softness is gone, and the "cocoon"

Great read!

This poem is very creative and I found it to be unique in the way that it's written. I like the imagery that this piece implants in my head, being a lover of birds I have knowledge of vultures they are scavengers that eat anything so I'm interpreting that whoever came between the two in this relationships had eaten everything leaving nothing for the two that'd once had it all.

Great write.

I very much like the start line of this poem, creative and intriguing the reader straight away.....that the pillow is soaked with your tears and your eyes are watery nice use of interpretation.

Your implying in the poem that the vulture is the person who hurt you and been betrayed by and he would demise each relationship he would be in, thus he would move onto the next person or relationship and prey upon that individual as he did to you. This is not very good, to hurt someone who cares for you and destroying everything, I think this person has commitment issues.

Great write!

Very interesting piece that's for sure. I see power behind it, how you used the vulture in the tense that you did. It was very unique. I can picture it all in my head very well. 5/5 and added to my faves.

This poem is extremely atmospheric, the imagery is very powerful, and paints a vivid picture for the reader. This has made me want to read more of your work! I loved "disrupting simultaneous symphonies of hearts" and the dramatic ending. I wondered if the first line shouldn't be Glassy eyes have caused soaked pillows? Although I can see that it could work both ways. A couple of typos simultanoues should be simultaneous and simphonys should be symphonies, this is nothing that cannot be solved with a little editing. All in all I really enjoyed the emotion and imagery in this piece.

This is a very unusual love poem and really quite deep

Well written

Very original. Not the usual lost love/relationship poem. I love the whole idea of the vulture. Vultures don't feed on strong, healthy "prey". They wait til its weak, helpless, hopeless.. or until someone else does the hard work of killing it. In this case, I imagine the prey was already weak and he waited for his perfect moment to feast on it. Interesting write.

-Liz