Holy Chickpeas!

MaryAnne................................................................................................................ You left me like this O_o

Gorgeous x1000

I love this. Kind of refreshing.. can't really explain it o.O lol

I was revisiting old profiles I used to read and I'm glad I came back here!:)

As usual from you, a great poem crammed with detail and imagery.

nominated.

Stunning piece!

So glad this won... It's a very unique write, MaryAnne. I want to comment thoroughly, but I lack the time... excuse me :/

MaryAnne,

This is filled with the anticipation of a life to yet be discovered. I love the images you provided the reader with and how you were able to let them in on your deepest thoughts.

I know you will always be a writer, in whatever form it will take, it is who you are, it is in your blood.

Well done, sweet girl, and congratulations on the win:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

This poem is probably one best example of motivational poems that is meant to inspire and motivate (especially younger) readers to not only pursue their dreams but to make them a reality.

I find the allusion of Tokyo here--clever, considering the fact that it is the largest metropolitan area in the world. Tokyo here represents the author's dream.

In the first stanza, the poet describes herself as helpless (lost child) when it comes to pursuing her dreams right away. She is also aware that the path to pursuing dreams can be deceiving; hence, she is taking one step at a time.

"A stranger, smelling strongly of cigarettes and cinnamon," the stranger being mentioned here, is probably symbolizing elderly people who have seen and experienced things we may never know, or maybe decades away from learning ourselves.

The next three stanzas describe her changing life and how she works to build personal confidence through others' experiences and presence.

The final stanza indicates that she is brave now and is no longer afraid of facing challenges in life knowing that there are also others out there with the same dreams and aspirations.

A very moving poem that uses effective diction and clever imagery. Well done!