Randy a nice return. I was so engrossed in each word and had chill bumps. As my mother use to say, your words congered up such real images in my mind. Good work. Plus it leaves the reader with a hint of mystery, was it really a dream or an actual encounter with her spirit.

Another thought I had on this is that I am not sure it belongs in the explicit genre. You have written it very tastefully. It is somewhat sensual but not suggestive or vulgar. I don't think there would be a uproar if it was in maybe the dark or even love genre.

This is an OUTSTANDING write Randy! :) I love the eeriness ... and how your poem just captivates from start to finish. You bring so much into this poem that truely draws the reader in.

So good to read from you again!
Psst ... Will be voting this one defo in the weekly contest! :D
Love the rhyme and rhythm throughout too Randy..... You have excelled!

Keep penning :))
~ Olwin

A perfect ghost story to tell by a campfire. Enjoyable read. :)

Quite a eerie piece, Congrats on the win.

This I really loved it!! So dark yet so passionately alluring and vivid images for the reader to just see. I like the flow and the smoothness this write has..Indeed a very well deserved win!! Congrats!!!

I just wish I could vote this one again for the contest :)

Loved it, very nicely painted :)

Congrats again on the win.

all the best & take care

Wow this took my breath away, excellent write

To me quite simply this is how a poem should be written, there are many people on here who like to write to forms and I have noticed a few who seem to enjoy mixing forms. But this is poetry. It flows beautifully and takes us by the hand leading us through a tale that has imagery leaping from every stanza. The rhyming is unforced which is an art in itself. It is not trying to be clever, it is just powerful in its own right with such an eerie atmosphere. I think Randy has written a masterpiece and I am not going to do it a disservice by tearing it apart stanza by stanza, I just urge anybody reading this comment to read the poem.

(Weekly Contest Comment - 12/31/12)

The title is what first caught my eye and I just had to see what this was all about. As I started to read, each stanza just drew me in deeper and deeper. It definitely reminds me of ancient times, as the one line reads "on rocky paths of ancient years" I get that picture in my head as I read through. The darkness of the sky with dark stone buildings, cold out and you can see your own breath as you walk along the path... Candles, the only source of light back then, makes everything seem so eerie on the inside yet so warm and inviting as well. You can feel the passion and heat. Then in the end it makes you wonder... hhhmmm... was it just a dream or was this a real spiritual encounter, it leaves me wanting you to write a part 2... The flow and rhyme of this write made it read splendidly and seemed to add so much more character to the write , I actually went back and read it a couple of times that's how much it captivated me. I enjoy dark poetry and have not read a good one in a long time until now. A picture well painted Randy, well done (10)

Every line that I read brought new images into my mind. It was vividly written and very powerful. Thank you for sharing!

Every line that I read brought new images into my mind. It was vividly written and very powerful. Thank you for sharing!