For years

by Aubrey   Dec 28, 2012


For years I hid my pain
To keep my mind from going insane
For years I smiled and held back the tears
To stay away from all the fear
I just keep it all inside
And lie and say I'm alright
But I just want someone to say
"Bullshit"
and hold me "Oh so tight "
to let me cry on their shoulder
To pull me just a little closer
To whisper "it's OK"
but I don't have time for childish games
Some would say
So for years
It's always been this way.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    It's great you've written this, Aubrey. The rhymes did flow quite well though some would say they're trite and overused. I think it's good when we write them ourselves, however many times they've been written and rewritten by others. It's cathartic, yes?

    "For years I hid my pain
    To keep my mind from going insane
    For years I smiled and held back the tears
    To stay away from all the fear"

    My first poems were also rhymed; right now, I very rarely rhyme unless it comes naturally. This was forced - the syllable count was irregular, but it did flow nicely when I read it.

    It's very common for people these days to just 'fake' it once in a while, but for some, it is a daily routine. And it does get tiring. It takes time for people to get out of their shells, or perhaps break down barriers they've created over the years. But sometimes a little push, whether from someone - as it is in this poem - or from instances, situations and the like would definitely help.

    If I could give any advice or anything, it would be to watch the capitalisation. It would look much neater. And since you've finally written this, perhaps you could write something different, not just different from your own work, but something that would stand out from other people's work, whilst expressing yourself - your feelings and such.

    Nice job. Keep writing.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Pretty cool, you are really good at rhyming keep it up.

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