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This ones got me thinking Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds by the beatles... specifically the bit with marshmallow clouds (i know it was marmalade skies in the song but still theres marshmallow pie later in the song.) anyway its definitely a poem i can relate to, love lost is something everyone can relate to... we've all experienced something that just didnt work out.

Oooooh. I like this. It's insanely sensory. I love the adjective used here.

I pictured marshmallow clouds
and sunflower fields. I pictured kites
flying and birds chirping, children playing
and newly mothers nursing.

^That was so brilliant. I found myself smiling reading that. Absolutely beautiful. This is a very sad piece. Separating for eternity is the message I'm picking up here. It looks like maybe there is no room, or the lover just doesn't fit into your eternity. Either way, this was great.
I'm a fan! :)

I'm sorry to mimic everyone else but Wow! This is so powerful and candid. I love your honesty! I didn't know how your story would end, and that's great. It was really beautiful because it was simple yet so thought provoking and real. Great job!

"I pictured marshmallow clouds
and sunflower fields. I pictured kites
flying and birds chirping, children playing
and newly mothers nursing.

I picture life in it's most peaceful state,
but I can't picture a future for you and I
beyond the golden gates."

I really enjoyed these last two stanzas, you wrote this in a way that I could feel your pain. Very strong and real feeling in this, so many can relate. 5/5

Wow Autumn... you are amazing! I just love the way you have penned this. The curiousity, the pain, the sadness and the happiness within can be felt so deeply. I can picture an entirely different imagery with every stanza as it unfolds. I just love the sad ending. After eyeing so much, you don't see a future with the person and soon all the dreams fail, the curiousity dies and life ceases...
Beautiful!!