I love this! You are a great poet! Keep it up!

You have a great use of vocabulary in this piece, as well as imagery.

The whole idea is really great, ember turning to cinder. I love the word cinder, lol. It reminds me of the poem I wrote for your challenge a while back, lol.

Very deep-rooted emotions here, I can tell this poem came from some feelings that were bottled for a little too long.