Conceal

Id have to agree with skyler a bit about the beginning into the middle, but it definitely got a lot more brilliant around the beginning. being on this site, i have read a LOT of poetry about cutting, but this one was subtle enough in its usage, and eloquently powerful enough to be unique on a wide variety of levels. definitely an thoughtful read with a lot of meaning behind the lines.

The visuals are a bit over-zealous at first, but it weaves into an awe inspiring rhetoric.

This is a so incredibly sad. It's a toxic relationship that the speaker is in, and they recognize it. But, at the same time, the speaker's heart is breaking because of this. There's a longing, the flavor in this poem feels like they have given everything they can, and it was still not even close to being enough for the significant other.

"Close the blinds of these swollen
eyes because only here in complete
darkness I find the comfort I once
found at your side. "

This can be interpreted in two ways. 1. Sleeping is the new comfort. You can escape the actual painful feeling and just find comfort in slumber. 2. You can close your eyes and imagine the mentioned relationship as perfect, and untainted. Either way, it was such a fantastic closing.

The speaking about blood loss was a terrific metaphor. In a sense, relationships like these are totally draining, and they drain you until they can't anymore, until you have nothing left to give.

Beautiful metaphors!

I quite enjoyed this! It was beautiful!
In the sixth stanza (I don't know if anyone else has said this) I think you should change evident to evidence. I don't think you were intending to be grammatically incorrect, but if you were, then by all means, keep it!
This poem was simplistic in metaphors, and the use of cliches was minimal, but still there. However, it's not corny or over the top. C: I loved the first two lines, and I'm glad you carried that through the poem. Why was t called conceal? I'm not sure i got that from the poem. I feel as if reveal is more appropriate.
Oh, I just read through it again,
In the fifth stanza, you say broke and I think broken is grammatically correct.
But this was beautiful! Even though there were not a lot of complex metaphors, the simplicity wasn't as awkward as most poems nowadays.
Beautiful! Keep it up! c:
-z

Its always sad to be hurt and especially for that person not to realise of the actions played upon your feelings. Yet it also depends on what that person meant if verbal actions that were taken and not committed by physical performances, thus the two could talk and work out the differences as well as what each were implying to understand the outcome.

Good use of metaphors as well and a very well written poem

5/5