Comments : Burning Teabag

  • 7 years ago

    by Ares

    I adore this! I do a lot of my writing in a similar style where you take an every-day-situation or a common household thing and either elevate it to contain a higer purpose and/or meaning or you take said thing/situation and use it to describe something else entirely. Very smart and efficiantly written! Another 5 for you!

    -Ares

  • 7 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Haha this was awesome saffs

    Loved the metophors but all I could think
    Was a comedy kids cartoon lol

    Brilliant

  • 7 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Oh mercy NO... you are not a tea bag in my eyes... you are my sweet Saffie <3

    This poem grabbed me.. it was so creatively written... love the tea bag metaphor in explaining your feelings! this was a powerful piece!!

  • 7 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    I love how you made this sound like someone is making tea. Nice metaphor. You express your feelings very well.

  • 7 years ago

    by myonlymoon

    This was so inventive and creative, i really enjoyed reading this. the title firstly, grabbed my attention- I had no idea that the poem would detail all this, so refreshing and new! i loved every bit of it. such a great job!!!
    it was a fun read (:

  • 7 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Curious title; I loved it. That and how I love tea pulled me in to read this. Using the tea bag metaphor throughout the whole piece was quite risky yet you managed to do it beautifully. Sad ending. I guess some people make us feel that way.
    'Limited craving' is such a depressing but perfect phrase to describe this.

  • 7 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    Nicely written, I really like how you used none-stop metaphers, I love metaphers

  • 7 years ago

    by Hellon

    The creativity of this poem is outstanding. To compare yourself to a little teabag is just jaw-dropping! Yes, metaphors are used here but you actually introduct the subject for them in your title and throughout the verse making it easier to understand but taking nothing away from the content of the poem...I really loved this one....very, very original!

  • 7 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Very creative with a deep meaning, love it

  • 7 years ago

    by Amreen

    This is a wonderful poem in every sense of the word! You are damn creative in the way you have described 'Limited craving' of people and the metaphor of a tea bag is incredible and amazing! I love the flow of the poem and the emotions each syllable carried.
    Keep penning:)

  • 7 years ago

    by Meme

    These kind of poems always interest me, the idea of taking something so far from poetry world and personalising it so that it impersonate a character is so brilliant. Having all different terminologies that may refer to that certain thing actually representing some different feelings and emotions and built up to match the story you tell.

    You went through the whole process of preparing a simple cup of tea, but let me tell you that to someone who doesn't belong to poetry this might seem so shallow, but we know better don't we?! I was fascinated by how simple your description was going through all the different mini stages of preparing a cup of tea but actually referring to something else at the same time. Being used by someone then getting hurt by them, only to end that process by being left away; as if we were only introduced in their life to fulfill a certain purpose and after than we just become collateral damage.

    Great Piece, and perfectly written.

  • 6 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow! I love this poem. First, super creative!! I love how you compared yourself to a tea bag, and showed how you were used and thrown away. I really enjoyed it from start to finish.

    Great job!

  • 6 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I had to think about this one which is rare for me but you did such a great job with it. I love how you started out seemingly with happiness and even bliss. You are this teabag it seems and I loved the metaphor becauseythis "other person" has only the taste for you. I love the combination of the words gently and sprinkle. I think they work so well together to help enhance the poem. I like how you make this turn "dark" right away because that's how fast life can really turn. I like how you say you are drowning as well. You are trying to escape from a current but it keeps pushing you around and soon it will swallow you. Like the comparison to datkness or anything negative. I like how you made the metaphor and tone throughout the whole poem and draw the reader in. Then it hits you hard at the end. "You have served your purpose" that is sad. It seems like this person just hurt you and then you just got lost. Great write

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I love how creative this was. You took something so common to everyday, unique to the world of authors, and personal to you in your own way and wrote this extremely phenomenal piece. I think that your word choice was amazing, you created the entire scene and still related it to yourself, without making it too obvious. I love the perspective this took on and the way you chose to wrote.

    Thank you for penning something so unique yet so universal.

    I really did enjoy this piece.

  • 6 years ago

    by unico

    Great poem! It reminds me of Patrick Jane from the tv show The Mentalist :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Wonderfully Done. From Your Concept To The Penning There Of!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Great use of metaphor - highly original piece. Good job, Saffie.