:-0!!!!!

My my my...what have we here...a poem that has left me a wee bit tongue tied....My thoughts are all over the place here Nana.

I absolutely LOVE the wording here, the way the woods were described was beautifully written, you could have kept it simple, but you the poetic arrangement of words here just made the imagery so much more real.

I love the rhyme here.....There was no structure to the rhyme which is what I usually don't like, but this...now this just seemed like the rhymes happened accidentally..it all just flowed so nicely together.

You have made "goodbye" so much more heartbreaking with this piece, but I love poetry that gets me to cry, or really feel the pain of the author....so moving.

You are incredible. Exceptional write.

Honestly, this piece has an awesome addiction to it. Maybe the pace? it was really fantastic! or the tone of yours? Haunting!! or the random rhymes...

Amazing write my friend! :D

.......... Nominated!!

OK, I am really struggling to keep it together now, after reading this, I just don't know what to say or do...it's just so heart wrenching, the whole essence of goodbye,

the poetic wording, rhymes that were all over the place yet somehow worked and worked well, the emotion, imagery, the tone was like utterly sombre, and totally captivating...

It just took me into a place that I should not want to visit again but somehow weirdly do, because it just made me sit up straight and blub like a baby...

I love this...totally awesome write

OMG I AM SO HAPPY!!! This truly deserved to win...it was so well written and just ughh...you know I love it! :)

Wow. This is really good. I wish I had better adjectives than that, but wow.

"but instead you'd throw the blame
on the sun for not shining,
the birds for being hushed,
... the humankind for the art of lying."

^^ Everyone always seems to search for an answer as to why people give up, or commit suicide, and all it would take is a look inside your mind to look through your eyes, and see the hurt wherever your eyes moved. That was fantastic. To express that lying can be an art, was genius. Some people can take it to that form and affect the others around them so badly.

"If you could last one, bare feet, minute,
above the cutting cold that lays underneath-
you might understand how it feels.

To not remember that you're here,
to lose the path of how to breathe
just lay half hollow, half dead,
would you simply rest in peace?"

You're expressing just how impossible it is for somebody else to comprehend your pain. That nobody else could hold it like you do. They would collapse if they were the one holding your anguish inside their body. What a beautiful way to describe such awful feeling. I want to cry for the speaker in this piece.

I see why this won. Absolutely brilliant.

Very provoking piece, raised some chilling questions and an eerie picture with the woods, but had me wondering about this character's life and why her life seems to end on such a hopeless tone.....it makes me feel sympathy for the speaker yet also wonder who left in their life to make such loneliness feel so tangible. Great write, congrats on the win! :]

Ms. Sunshine congratulations!

Well done Ms Sunshine, much deserved.

Waw guys! thank you so much really...I did not expect this poem to be actually liked that much

Shifti ya habla? :P

I told youuuu it's amazing.
W I'm sure the upcoming ones would be like that (but no pressure :P lool)

<3

Wow! Cunny twist of d use of words. Professionally done. Nice one.

[Weekly Contest Comment: 2/4/13]

There was such a solemn tone here, that was easy to be taken into. The poet's use of imagery brought my heart into this piece and made me not just feel, but see and hear the sound of loneliness and what makes a goodbye so sad. I think woods are always beautiful even though they may have secrets in them or some type of mystery, and you bring the soul of these woods to life- there is also some bitterness here especially when the poet is talking about how this person blamed all their surroundings. It also makes me think this person has no will to continue and all you want is for them to have not surrendered. Heartfelt poem.

(Weekly Contest Comment - 2/4/13)

A heart wrenching breathtaking masterpiece is what this is. From beginning to end you can feel the pain, and heart ache. The word choice is amazing, I just love the first opening line about the woods and I like how there is sporadic rhyming, I'm one of those that it either has to all rhyme or not rhyme at all, but this just flows so naturally and made for a wonderful read. Well done (10)