What a beast of a title, and this is for starters. :)

As a beginner, I think that you are impressively improving (note the alliteration here, which is also incorporated in this poem of yours:

"much more", and "soul sour".

"Little did he know, he would later [lose] his sight.
^ probably, just a typo, but I thought, I should let you know.

Well, good job writing in this form. Rules were strictly adhered to, syllable count and rhyme scheme were flawless. And, this is, in my opinion, the best formed poem, you have written, so far, that, aside from haiku and senryu. And I'm looking forward to read more.

:)

Insightful piece! Stunning! The word choice is brilliant and the rhyming is loveable. I encourage you to write this way.

Wow... I see a lady emerging as another example of form writer! This is so thoughtful and brilliant.
Keep writing:)