Mindful Desire

I see what you try to express with this poem here. To always be careful with desire and to always want the right thing. For example pro-life decisions support what is right so they should be the ones you choose.

First and foremost, uor poem, it has a very gud impact on the reader. It is about being positive which is quite important in todays world of stress.

Now, the only thing i found wrong is the use of unnecessary words.

there should not be all in the first line.
second stanza's last line, it could have been like this.
So, just be careful.
Third stanza's last line, u wrote down too long in comparison to the previous ones which interupts d flow of the reader.
Try to split it into two.

Try out each day
and get a new start.

do not use '&' for and again in formal writing.
It's not good.

Write more, u are gifted.

I really liked this poem...the flow and rhyming both are good. well done and keep writing more.

Great, is the only word I can use to describe such beauty.

After "barriers" you should've put "are" in my opinion and capitalize the first letter of every new stanza my dear but i really like the message here and the way it just flowed BEAUTIFULLY everything was perfect besides what i mentioned good luck my dear

Queen Ashlin